Blindsided By Betrayal

December 30, 2008
By Erin Mays, West Chester, OH

Funny how I trusted you.
Funny how I believed you.
Let me tell you,
It's not so funny now.
No, it's not so funny now.

I trusted you.
You weren't supposed to hurt me,
You weren't supposed to lie to me.
I trusted you.

Funny how I played right in to your hand.
Funny how all I wanted was your touch.
Let me tell you,
It's not so funny now.
No, it's not so funny now.

Let me tell you this,
Your words hurt the worst.
My faith in you is gone.
You left me riddled with holes
And now the blood has begun,
Begun to run.

The author's comments:
Inspiration is a fickle thing. It is often driven by heartache and love. Two completely paradoxal things. Personally, this poem represents me everytime I've had my heart broken even a tiny bit by someone I loved.

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on Dec. 29 2009 at 9:12 pm
lost♥in♥love SILVER, Waterloo, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
everyone sez that love hurts, but thats not true. its things like lonlieness, Rejection, & Losing someone that hurt. In reality, LOVE is the only thing in this world that covers up that pain and makes us feel wonderful again

i love this poem it realates so much to my life

on Aug. 3 2009 at 6:06 pm
blackamethyst GOLD, Centerville, Ohio
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Oh wow. I love it. Don't worry about it sounding like 'teen angst', its just raw emotion that teens can relate to. Keep writing

EdytD SILVER said...
on Apr. 8 2009 at 1:27 am
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
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when you think about it, it doesn't have to necessarily relate to a boy. it can also be a friend, a parent, anyone one becomes close to. i can definitely relate to the poem, as i have felt incredibly angry at my parents, and have also had a supposed "close friend" who has threatened to post things that she thinks makes me upset in the school yearbook. (she didn't, but she often threatens ppl... not much of a friend.)



it almost sounded like a song to me, with the "no it's not so funny now" repetition. it reminded me of Cat's in the Cradle: "you know we'll have a good time then..." I also love to play with repetition; i use it in my poem "a lonely rain" - if you want to check it out, the URL is TeenInk.com/raw/Poetry/article/91407/A-Lonely-Rain/.

thanks, and i hope you find someone better than whoever you were writing this poem to.

on Mar. 3 2009 at 2:07 am
blingblang4eva ELITE, Fayetteville, Georgia
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i rly rly liek this. i think it's about an ex. i cxan toally relate with the fickle feelings of love n hate. :)

Erin Mays said...
on Jan. 20 2009 at 5:14 pm
Okay, I get that it is drenched in teen angst, it was written in angst and I am a teenager. However, it is about more than just angst and being overly emotional. Please look deeper, just don't merely write it off because it expresses an emotion you feel is whiny. Thank you. (Please note that I don't mean to be quarrelsome or demeaning to the reviewer, I just want to address this for future readers and reviewers.)

oruga101 said...
on Jan. 20 2009 at 4:20 am
I'm sorry, but this is drenched in teen angst.

RGallagher said...
on Jan. 10 2009 at 7:43 pm
I <3 this poem! This is my favorite one of yours. Keep up the good work, Erin!


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