Pretty Girrl?

December 8, 2008
By Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
\\\\\\\"Time brings all things to life, in that I trust it so.\\\\\\\" ~ Willie Stark


Whats new with you pretty girrl?
I saw you walking through my mind
I couldn't help but stare
Staring at thoughts
thoughts I like to think you think as well
Cause you're like the sun under the ocean
beautifuly diluted
afraid to get to close
for fear of death
but I wonder if its worth it
most likely
what's life without risk
without happiness
without death
without this
wishing waiting
breathing
exiled from the exiles
proffering not to know me
but knowing you know me.


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lissa_ GOLD said...
on Jan. 19 2013 at 5:56 pm
lissa_ GOLD, Salt Lake City, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"If you don't stand for something you'll fall for anything."- Suckerpunch
"The purpose of life is to be a better version of yourself."- Lucy Hale

This is my favorite poem I've read on Teenink and probably anywhere else for that matter! It really speaks to me, and I love how unexpecting it is. I'm sure anyone who sees the title "pretty girl" is going to expect a sappy romance.  Never stop writing. If you do, no girl will ever think the same thoughts you do. --indiewriter<3

on Jul. 10 2012 at 4:01 am
LongLazyDays55 BRONZE, Other, Other
3 articles 0 photos 95 comments

Favorite Quote:
I haven't failed. I just haven't found 10,000 ways that won't work. [Thomas Edison]

When words fail, music speaks.

It's, again a really lovely poem. I like the describing in your poems. Oh, and imagery. Forgot about that. :D Keep writing! :)

on Jun. 18 2012 at 8:08 pm
MayaaMagdy BRONZE, Nasr City, Other
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 I really like this 

 


on Feb. 29 2012 at 1:47 pm
jeseer PLATINUM, Auburntown, Tennessee
22 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Truth without love is a killer, but love without truth is a liar. The Bible commands us to have both: It says to speak the truth in love."--Elliott Nesch
"To love another person is to see the face of God."--Victor Hugo

Awesome poem. Very intriguing

 


on Dec. 25 2011 at 9:57 pm
Mrs.LOver SILVER, Clewiston, Florida
6 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
'as we grow older together, as we continue too change with age , there is one thing that will never change. i will always keep in fallin in more love with you every second''

wow i love your poem its the best ima killer for free verse love poems :)

on Sep. 6 2011 at 4:23 pm
thesilentgirl BRONZE, Suwanee, Georgia
1 article 4 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A mind is a terrible thing to waste."

I read all your poems, and I have to say, you are so talented. Your poems flow so beautifully, with perfect imagery. You are incredible talented, and you just insipred me to go write some poetry of my own. Well done! :)

myway BRONZE said...
on Aug. 15 2011 at 5:11 am
myway BRONZE, Noida, Other
2 articles 3 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have not failed 1,000 times. I have
successfully discovered 1,000 ways to NOT make a light bulb."
- Thomas Edison

hey amazing poem! loved it :)

Mikieslove said...
on Jul. 25 2011 at 12:08 am
Mikieslove, Harrisburg, Pennsylvania
0 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
I have soo many its way to hard to choos one

wow, that was amazing ive read one other of your poems ( a play on a play with words:) forgive me if i got that wrong but it amazes me how much you say with the little you write  well thats how poetry supposed to be isnt it lol,its beautiful and amazing and makes me speechless everytime i liek your work i can feel it i feel like im in a movie when the girls reading and she is narrating her own story or what not i love it off to read more:)

on Jun. 10 2011 at 1:42 pm
Mickie... SILVER, Hamilton, Other
8 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Your Shin: A device for finding furniture in the dark." "
If you tell a man the universe has two billion stars, he'll believe you, but tell him that that bench has wet paint and he'll have to touch it to make sure."

 This is, pretty ;).

on Feb. 24 2011 at 6:35 pm
badwriterbetterreader101 GOLD, St. Louis, Missouri
19 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To have something you've never had you must do something you've never done."

I read your pieces all the time (a play on words is in my faves) you have a way of saying the most random irrelevant things and yet it all makes sense hahah not like this comment. 

on Oct. 11 2010 at 12:47 pm
Michelle24 GOLD, Riverwoods, Illinois
19 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter, and those who matter don't mind."-Dr. Seuss

"Life is not measured by the breaths we take but by the moments that take our breath away."-Unknown

I love your pieces! I agree with Keyoka and Kiersten, but it's so beautiful! 

on Aug. 28 2010 at 1:35 pm
DifferentTeen PLATINUM, Seaford, Delaware
32 articles 2 photos 332 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There’s no such thing as true love, just spurts of insanity—falling over and over again, thinking that won’t happen to me"

Some of the lines are just great, and I've never been able to put them into words myself.I can relate to some of them, but some are just random. But you pulled it off, it still flows together and somehow it makes sense. Excellent job! Keep writing.

RiaRen SILVER said...
on Jun. 1 2010 at 8:18 pm
RiaRen SILVER, New Bothwell, Other
8 articles 0 photos 75 comments
i have to agree with keyoka... it is kind of jumbled and thrown on there, but it all connects perfectly... you style is fantastic... you're style is great... :)

keyoka SILVER said...
on Mar. 27 2010 at 8:05 pm
keyoka SILVER, Mckinney, Texas
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I like the way you write dude

I just check out someof your other poems

It's kind of jumbled, but not bad jumbled, good jumbled like thoughts, like each line connects together but is kind of random yet flows...I'm not making any sense...but I really like your style


skyler SILVER said...
on Mar. 5 2010 at 9:25 pm
skyler SILVER, Tayllorsville, Utah
8 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
live to love and love to live

another goreat one did anyhting happen with her

on Dec. 7 2009 at 8:56 pm
Sparkle345 GOLD, Phonix, Arizona
10 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is not measured my the breaths we take but by the moments that take our breath away"

i just read ur poem and it was great

on Nov. 16 2009 at 4:36 pm
writergirl22 SILVER, In, New York
6 articles 0 photos 66 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never frown. You never know who's falling in love with your smile." -Anounymous

ohh well thats good inspiration :)

on Nov. 16 2009 at 3:45 pm
Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\\\\\"Time brings all things to life, in that I trust it so.\\\\\\\" ~ Willie Stark

I wrote it about a girl I started talking to and she like my poetry and she wrote some of her own... and it's just sort of about that.

on Nov. 15 2009 at 9:06 pm
writergirl22 SILVER, In, New York
6 articles 0 photos 66 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never frown. You never know who's falling in love with your smile." -Anounymous

i really really liked that

what made you write it?


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