Barefoot, Helpless, and Broken

December 11, 2008
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Barefoot, helpless and broken-
she forces a smile for me.
I watch her travel long dirt roads that lead to broken dreams.
I reach for her, to take her away,
She tells me:"No, I want to stay."
I let her make her own mistakes and leave her there alone.

Barefoot, helpless, and broken-
alone without a friend.
Precious life slipped through my fingers...should've saved her then.
I watched her travel long dirt roads that led sudden death...
to wash myself away in guilt until there's nothing left.
Her face appears, sometimes at night,
her beauty just the same.
She tells me: "This is not your fault, our friendship hasn't changed."
Before my best friend disappears,
we reminisce through all those years,
before I'd faced my biggest fear
of losing half of me.





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mechanicalpencil13 said...
Jul. 22, 2015 at 1:28 pm
You haven't experienced this literally? This was so accurate-it made me cry. you are so talented. don't stop writing.
 
Annibonny said...
Oct. 1, 2011 at 4:02 pm
I love this! It has so much emotion. Great job!
 
anne.Brooke said...
Feb. 14, 2011 at 9:45 am
Your poems depict emotions beautifully...very sharp,very precise and totally thought provoking. Keep writing...there's a lot that I've to learn from you...
 
lostandconfused replied...
Apr. 8, 2011 at 8:55 am
you are a amazing writer :)
 
anne.Brooke replied...
Jun. 18, 2011 at 9:09 am
:)........................
 
Emilie J. said...
Sept. 9, 2010 at 4:33 pm
Your amazing!
 
megan? said...
May 3, 2010 at 8:50 pm
You showed emotion, quite well. I lost my best friend. This is what it's like..
 
Lexaaa. said...
Apr. 12, 2010 at 6:59 pm
all of your peoms are amazing... you'll be on the best seller's list someday :)
 
@ngel said...
Feb. 27, 2010 at 5:14 am
i love all ur poems so far,u really depict them out well..:)
 
Malory_Sturling said...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 1:23 pm
OH MY GOSH!!!! AMAZZINNGGG!!! everything that i have read of yours so far is so good. love it!
 
SophaDee This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 20, 2009 at 8:32 pm
The wording in this poem is really powerful, and especially if you haven't experienced this before i think it was a really good interpretation of what it feels like to lose a friend (i wouldn't know either, but still.)
 
chu-chi,!!! said...
Nov. 9, 2009 at 11:26 am
I love the way you choose to word your poems. All of your poems are wonderful, because you elaborate them by making your words an image. You write poems that no one can understand the first time they read it, but that's a good thing, because you want to draw people into your writings and that's what you do. People really have to analyze your writings in order for them to relate to your poems.
You are one of the best writers I have come across. So don't ever let anyone destr... (more »)
 
ElizabethW. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 7, 2009 at 8:32 pm
Trust me, you pulled it off. If you hadn't said anything, I would have thought you had written this while sobbing next to their grave or something. You portray emotion so beautifully.
 
Jessica C. said...
Mar. 3, 2009 at 1:42 am
i am in love with your work i have been submitting peice after peice if you ahve any tip fro me i would love to get them....btw all you poems are amazing and i love your writing style!!!
 
Syriastine Pincess said...
Feb. 28, 2009 at 5:42 am
This poem is AMAZING! Even though I never lost a friend, I felt as if it happened. Keep up the good work!!
 
brilliantbreakthrough said...
Jan. 13, 2009 at 4:05 pm
Even though you may not have personally experienced this yourself,
you had me fooled.
It was beautiful and heartbreaking because the poem allows you to feel as if you are losing a friend.
At first I didn't understand what it was about but the ending brought it into a strong, full closure.
That was good for this poem because just like she was losing her friend I was losing myslef in the writing, and then at then end I didn't even need you to tell me, because I felt it.
 
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