December 10, 2008
Lost a part of myself today

Got rejected last night

Told that I was too immature

And that I need to grow up

The invisible hand on my heart tightens

Choked in its grasp

Unable to get out

Now the words of rejection flood my mind


I don’t want you in my life

Someone told me to leave you in the dark,

That someone your former friend,

Unable to do anything right

Making a complete mess of my life

How much more can a heart be forced to hold?

How much more hurt must be piled on top without a break?

What way to put the past all behind

And all my regrets?

A shattered heart

A broken mind

It feels like I lost my best friend today

And maybe I have

A feeling so fresh

The scar so long and deep on my heart

Yet only one among many others

Shall time help it fade?

My hurt go away?

My life ever be enjoyable again?

I lost a lot today

But what tomorrow shall I gain?

And yet to lose another day?

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krazeecasey13 said...
Jan. 27, 2010 at 8:17 pm
this reminds me
of a scar on my heart.
literally everything.
this was beautiful =)
PoetryGirl said...
Aug. 23, 2009 at 9:01 pm
Nice poem. It really speaks to me and that's what poetry should do. Really nice job.
Amber S. said...
Aug. 12, 2009 at 1:27 am
i like your style of writing, it reminds me of my own. this is kind of sad, but it reminds me of a scar on my heart.
awesomeaugust This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 1, 2009 at 11:55 pm
really good job. I'd love any feedback you have on my poetry. thanks!
Kittie said...
Aug. 1, 2009 at 10:24 pm
wow is all i can say
oddpen said...
Aug. 1, 2009 at 3:43 pm
Very mature and well written!!! U have an interesting writing style, and it helps the reader feel what the speaker(right word?)is feeling. Write more!!!!
project827 said...
May 29, 2009 at 2:01 am
very good poem and subject matter, but you could work on it and tighten things up a bit, and you could have something extremely good.
hbwriter This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 28, 2009 at 8:26 pm
Great job! You sure do have a lot of top 25 poems!
It's interesting the way you didn't include some words so the poem sounded kinda broken-almost like what the poem talks about, about being broken.
I'm learning how to analyze a poem, so I hope that helped you learn something new about your poetry. i have a teacher who always shows me something interesting about my poetry I didn't notice before. If you did see it, and meant the poem to be taken like that, extra cognrats ... (more »)
baron said...
Mar. 27, 2009 at 2:56 am
That is amazing. I think that is one of the best pieces ive read in a while. I completely understand I was reading it and it was exactly how i feel. That is amazing i hope you keep writing. Excellent Job!!! :)
White_fang said...
Mar. 3, 2009 at 2:41 pm
this is so true. i was right along with you the whole way and i totally agree with your final stanza. sometimes when you lose this things it seems like your world is going to end. but then you move one and find something better
Peaceseeker said...
Feb. 24, 2009 at 12:44 am
This poem is kinda sad! I feel bad!
Now I don't know that much about poetry but I think this is real good! :) :) :) :) :) :)
painthorselove said...
Dec. 18, 2008 at 11:55 pm
awesome sammy! i love it!
FelixLikesCookies said...
Dec. 18, 2008 at 10:38 pm
wow this is amazing write more (:
brob said...
Dec. 18, 2008 at 10:13 pm
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