About to Melt

December 7, 2008
By claudia42 GOLD, Chalfont, Pennsylvania
claudia42 GOLD, Chalfont, Pennsylvania
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The earth was melting over,
along with my eyes.
I just barely saw the sign
that made me sure that I would be alright.
The pool was near, I wiped the sweat
off of my five-year-old forehead,
and raced to the public fountain of youth.

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This article has 6 comments.

because_ican said...
on May. 14 2009 at 3:02 pm
I really love the simplicity of this poem. The shortness of it makes me think that it is by a child, but it is still very sophisicated.

makesmesmile said...
on Dec. 15 2008 at 10:21 pm
omg that was amazing! i loved it!

the 1st time i read it i was like....huh?

and then the second time i read it it made a lot more sense

mae said...
on Dec. 15 2008 at 10:01 pm
i like thos a lot. i never thought of a swimming pool as so poetic!

on Dec. 15 2008 at 9:56 pm
hmm. interesting. the first time i read through it...i was thoroughly confuzed..haha. but the second time it made complete sense. nice job, i really like it. =]

on Dec. 15 2008 at 9:55 pm
Yay! great poem Dara. I think it flows very nicely.

LadyLeighlyn said...
on Dec. 15 2008 at 9:52 pm
Dara, that was really good! I liked how it made you think that it was going to be something bad, and then it ended pleasantly. =D

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