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Kritios Boy Is My Lover

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O Kritios Boy, where have you been?
Who are you? Kritios Boy?
Your beautiful balance and contrapposto soothes
My hiccups. I love you kritios boy.
I want to touch you.
I want to hold you.
I want to kiss your smooth marble lips.
Mmmm mmmm good.





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Austin said...
Mar. 3, 2009 at 7:00 pm
eh, it was decent.
just for "constructive criticism"
stay away from the "marble lips" metaphor.
It, being used in Twilight, is now way too overused by others.
 
Anonymous This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 25, 2009 at 11:09 pm
ummmm...what? im thinking this may have been one of those situations where you had to be there. and obviously, when you love someone you see them diferently. it was.....ok, i guess. im not you, i cant feel it. i like your writing style, though. keep it up.
 
slewfest said...
Jan. 6, 2009 at 3:03 am
this poem makes every other poem i've ever read look childish in comparison. bravo, brave poet. bravo.
 
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