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Chaos Theory MAG

November 14, 2008
By Anonymous

Carolyn says she believes in angels
while mascara spiders creep thickly along the
heavy baggage beneath her eyes like the
black pitch of the school hallways at night or
the charcoal that she dips her fingernails in and I
remember cheating on my math test that morning
So
I tell her I believe in people.

Roasted honey nut, the color she was born with but
you really wouldn’t know it because of the midnight L’Oréal
she chooses, tragically highlighted with Punk Pink or
Raging Red from a bottle and 15
minutes of waiting –
It spills limply over her black eyes whenever she leans down to write and
Carolyn says she believes in fate.

In planets aligning in the universe and
Feng shui that keeps mice away and prevents ulcers but also
makes a girl fall in love with a boy but
I know all about chemistry and hormones and catalysts so I
think I believe in science.

In reincarnation, she thinks she’ll come back as a bird
Or maybe a peacock and I say I agree when I
see those striped stockings that come to her knees and
neon earrings lifeless at her shoulders but she only laughs …
tells me I never really see her and to
call her later.

Now with the dial tone in my ear
the cold trembling and I’m suffocating on nothing
because I really see her and I
know she believes in the afterlife but
she doesn’t believe in laughter and
the phone just rings and rings and rings …

Carolyn said she believed in angels.



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on Nov. 9 2009 at 3:17 pm
Sydneybriar BRONZE, Hastings, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"what is compassion without suffering?"
-Jamie Tornakowski

This was beautiful, the way you wrote it.

I teared up.

you have a future in this, or something near it.

Emmalee SILVER said...
on Nov. 9 2009 at 11:34 am
Emmalee SILVER, Rayville, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
Life is what happens when you're busy making other plans. - John Lennon

Wonderful. :)

on Nov. 9 2009 at 7:51 am
ariwrites94 GOLD, Deltona, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." ---Plato

Wonderful job!!!! you are a talented writer and keep up the good work! if u have time please check out my poem called "Sensitive Am I" and rate and leave a comment. Thanks and keep writing!

Lostinbooks said...
on Oct. 18 2009 at 10:40 pm
Lostinbooks, Arcadia, California
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YES! Who cares about grammar in poetry? It's a beautifully worded poem...and feels a lot truer than a lot of the other things I've read on here...

on Oct. 18 2009 at 6:52 pm
tennisislovee34 GOLD, Sterling Heights, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Every moment of your life, you're writing. Even in your dreams, you're writing. When you walk the halls in this school you meet various people and you write furiously in your head." -Frank McCourt

This is reallly good!:) I like it, it makes me teary eyed D: keep up the good workkK!

on Oct. 18 2009 at 5:19 pm
Hayden Lambert GOLD, Spring, Texas
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Wow! that is so good! I think the lack of punctuation makes it better! dont listen to those saying you made grammar mistakes... it's awesome.

on Oct. 18 2009 at 10:34 am
mellow_melon PLATINUM, Jefferson, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"Life is not measured by the number of breaths we take, but my the number of moments that take our breath away."

i love the way you make a picture in my head when i read that, it was fantastic! its sad, but its still one of the best poems ive read. ur a great writer!

on Oct. 2 2009 at 6:47 pm
InfinityRose SILVER, Ambler, Pennsylvania
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I think that is kind of rude to say, because this poem is about an incredibly sensitive, personal topic. I think this poem is beautiful, and so what if she could make a few grammatical changes - the emotion and the imagery were both amazing.

on Oct. 1 2009 at 5:26 pm
InfinityRose SILVER, Ambler, Pennsylvania
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The imagery in this is spectacular, and I find this poem incredibly sad, though beautifully written.

on Sep. 26 2009 at 9:34 pm
FlyleafFreak DIAMOND, Loveland, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"I have faith in fools;self confidence my friends call it"~Edger Allan Poe
"In this world of infinite insanity, your friends are the best psychiatrists you will ever have."~Me

Wow! This is one of the best articles ive ever read. I love the serious attitude with a dash of something else I cannot place my finger on. Keep on writing. I can't wait to see more from you!

ArianaT GOLD said...
on Sep. 26 2009 at 9:01 pm
ArianaT GOLD, Newark, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
You write the script to your own life...Don't let anyone take the pen from your hand!

Wow i really like this. The whole feel is foreshadowing, especially the part about her fingers being dipped in black. I love it--- its beautiful. I'm not sure if it matters how it's read? I know it's free verse, but some punctuation would help with how the author wants the pauses interpreted...thanks =)

on Sep. 26 2009 at 8:47 am
IsobelFree DIAMOND, Hamilton, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"As long as there is open road, the familiar has the most formidable competitor." - Anonymous

That is a great poem. Beautiful and touching. Keep on keeping on! =)

on Sep. 26 2009 at 8:11 am
FlamableFyre DIAMOND, Spartanburg, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
I don't have ambitions or desires.
Being a poet isn't my ambition,
it's my way of being alone.
~ Fernando Pessoa ~

wow, this is awesome!!!!! i love it, it makes you think a lot

on Sep. 24 2009 at 8:11 am
Mystery_Girl SILVER, Lake, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Love me or Hate me"......"Me Vs. The World and the World is Winning"......"When the going gets tough the tough get going".

This is amazing! My favorite! Beautiful!

on Aug. 24 2009 at 10:35 pm
kayleefaith PLATINUM, Norman, Oklahoma
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i think i can honestly say this is one of my favorite poems ive ever read... seriously great great writing.

on Aug. 23 2009 at 3:32 pm
Writerzhand GOLD, Ball Ground, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
I wanna carry a piece of who I was before so when I hit the wall, I REALLY hit the wall.

Wow, that's uber awesome! Great!

on Aug. 23 2009 at 1:38 am
Faithband3 BRONZE, Westbury, New York
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This piece is incredible. Beautiful

Schubster said...
on Aug. 22 2009 at 2:44 pm
awesome poem :) keep writing

on Aug. 22 2009 at 12:56 pm
Alectix Delacroix BRONZE, Orangeburg, South Carolina
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Awesome images and real life.

on May. 24 2009 at 8:11 pm
DreamingPoet89 DIAMOND, Hillsboro, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Life without love , is no life at all

This is very very GOOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Keep writing :-)