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Broken Promises

She floats down the hall with her friends all in tow,
Wrapped around her ponytail, is an oversized bow.

Eyes are on her with every step,
She’s full of life and so full of pep.

She walks with poise, she walks with grace,
With a smile that’s plastered upon her face.

She made a promise she said she’d keep,
But their praise took her over, now she’s in deep.

I lost her to fame, I lost her to praise,
I lost my best friend, leaving me in a daze.

As I look at her I feel I can't compare,
All eyes are on her everywhere!

It’s driving me crazy; it’s driving me insane,
It’s leaving me with nothing but a heart full of pain.

She has turned into the person she swore she’d never be,
Now she just walks with dignity and ignores me.

I lost my best friend; it’s something I have to accept,
I must forget the promise that she never kept…



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Jflood77 said...
Mar. 26 at 10:48 am
Okay, firstly the rhyming is well done. Secondly the lines are clever. Thirdly your voice is very apparent even within the consistent rhyming which is very hard to do, it shows that your rhymes come naturally and the story is being told, its not just a nursery rhyme that doesn't make sense. And its kinda sad too :/ Good job though! :)))
 
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Mar. 28 at 3:14 pm
Thanks! :)
 
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