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Fairyjail

August 14, 2013
By AnnieKate GOLD, Centerville, Utah
AnnieKate GOLD, Centerville, Utah
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Happily ever after?
Three words that fill me with laughter.
Princes are great, or so you think,
Till in their hands they have a drink.
Things go sour,
A drunk’s in the tower.
You’re no knight in shining armor.
You say you didn’t mean to harm her.
Who knew every girl’s dream would end up so mean?

If you’re Prince Charming he’s never been so alarming.
When you’re her Romeo, Juliet is far better staying a Capulet.
She’s a beauty, you’re a beast, and that is saying the least.
Barbie’s Ken turned out to be an ugly form of the race of men.
Fairytales are lies, this dashing suitor is the devil in disguise.
Instead of kissing the frog she should have kissed her dog.
If Rapunzel knew you could climb hair she’d have cut it off without a care.
No wonder Alice was in Wonderland, she didn’t have to deal with a man.
A fairytale starring one always seems to be the most fun.



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on Aug. 17 2013 at 5:30 pm
SwanSong SILVER, Millville, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Life is not measured by the number of breaths we take but by the moments that take our breath away."

I agree with the comment below that the rhyming seems to hold you back a bit in the second stanza, but it worked enough to make this a good poem. I love all of your references and I definelty got the woman's empowerment from this. I love the way you chose to get your message across. Nice work!

AnnieKate GOLD said...
on Aug. 15 2013 at 1:38 am
AnnieKate GOLD, Centerville, Utah
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Thanks! The advice about rhyming is super helpful, I'll be certain to use that in future work. I'm glad you saw some girl power action in there because that's what I was going for. ;)

on Aug. 14 2013 at 10:19 pm
tori-gurl PLATINUM, Norwich, New York
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Favorite Quote:
smile through everything no matter how bad it gets because it could be worse and if it gets worse well then it can only get better. :)

The idea behind this poem is so empowering to women (at least that is what i got out of this) and I just want to say cudos to you! However, I do feel like the rhyming in this poem hinders you in some places. You could do so much more with this poem and i dont want you to be held back from your full potential. I feel like it works in the first stanza, but it starts to weaken a bit in the second one. The whole idea of this poem is incredibly awesome and i love it :) All of your references definitely help strengthen your points and it is just so well written :) Good Job!!