Mermaids This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

September 17, 2008
Salty hair glides like seaweed
In the cool waters.
Sand beneath her toes,
Soft on bare feet.
Waves caress her tanned body,
Rocking her gently like an infant.
Diving under for sand dollars,
The currency of mermaids.
How many would she need before
Her legs turned into fins?
She lies on sun-baked rocks
Until the ocean calls her back
And she jumps into its open arms.
Other children swim with her,
But can’t keep up her pace.
A sign, she says,
That she wasn’t meant for land.
As her mother calls her back
She replies, “I’d rather just stay.”

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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Taty9 said...
Jan. 18, 2013 at 12:15 am
I adore mermaids:) Your poem is really good. I think you would enjoy mine, too. They're also about mermaids, but more dark; like sirens. Please check them out and let me know what you think:)
thoughtsofmine said...
Jul. 18, 2010 at 11:47 pm
i'm not sure exactly what you were thinking, because i am not you, but it kind of seems like she doesn't belong on land with the normals, and she is dying to live in the water, in a place where she belongs?
Squiddy said...
May 29, 2009 at 3:17 pm
i wish i were a mermaid but im just a squidd. bravo.
Katrina O. said...
May 9, 2009 at 3:04 pm
loooooooooove ittt
Alliekat said...
Mar. 20, 2009 at 11:53 pm
loved it. i love to swim, but im not an amazing swimmer as the girl in the poem is! anyway, it was great and i hope to read more of this authors work.
Austin said...
Mar. 8, 2009 at 5:50 am
i love it.
there's also been a song playing in my head "Of up and Coming Monarchs" by Pedro the Lion... it's about getting away... and i was thinking of that while listening. look the lyrics up, they're wonderful just like your poem
Me,Myself,andI This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 17, 2009 at 2:43 am
wow. i dont know what else to say, that is amazing, and so me. i love just laying at the bottom of pools for as long as i can, and the just better than i can explane. you totally encompased this feeling with tis, thanks!
Katelyn H. said...
Feb. 17, 2009 at 1:35 am
This is very good. I love all of the imagery and that I can picture the mermaid in my mind. Good job
ravengirl said...
Feb. 16, 2009 at 7:14 pm
you are a great writer keep it up because this throws so many memories songs and stories!
Perfectionist47 said...
Feb. 6, 2009 at 10:24 pm
It was pretty cool, very beautiful. I think that if you keep writing, your messages will become stronger, which is what I think poetry is all about. I'd like to read some of your other work! Good job!!!
ShamrockWriter said...
Feb. 1, 2009 at 12:30 am
Really nice poem. Love the similes and personification of the ocean. Fits amazingly into the overall poem. Great job! Keep Writing!
popiepolly:) said...
Jan. 25, 2009 at 12:10 am
Duckie430 said...
Jan. 19, 2009 at 9:46 pm
this is really cute
penguin35 said...
Jan. 16, 2009 at 6:53 pm
Beautiful poem! I am going to share it with my best friend!
popy said...
Jan. 15, 2009 at 2:43 pm
cute but really not cute enough ok
hopeful said...
Jan. 15, 2009 at 2:36 am
this is adorable ! i love it !
Mickey said...
Jan. 14, 2009 at 3:47 pm
this is a really cute poem... good job
DBrown said...
Jan. 12, 2009 at 8:17 pm
Melanie, this is wonderful! Thoughtful, beautifully composed and very evocative...You MUST keep writing!
mawmaw said...
Jan. 12, 2009 at 2:41 pm
Mel, WOW. I will read your poem again and again. It's beautiful--the imagery, the pace and tone. I especially love that question you ask in the middle. WOW. You have a poet's eye and heart. Happy Birthday.
Melllll582 said...
Jan. 8, 2009 at 1:36 am
haha I actually got the idea this poem from another poem about ice. It described like this kinship with skating, and it reminded me of my kinship with the ocean. We were supposed to write a winter poem but I opted out and wrote this haha
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