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I walk and walk
The silent road running
Beside the river dark.
Thoughtless my mind but in
My heart a fear outlandish lurk.
As i stride the road so clear,
Heaven caressing the end so near,
Dissecting me from everywhere
The unknown hauls me close.
A mile to go yet another.
The road without a start
Takes me further,liberating
Me from reality's embrace.
From dawn till dusk
And dusk till dawn
Its never the end but i go on
To envision myself
Tangled up in eternity.



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zendaya said...
Nov. 26, 2012 at 11:29 am
i love this poem great job
 
LestyP said...
Oct. 23, 2012 at 10:47 pm
Lovely, wonderful diction :)
 
alicorn_25 said...
Oct. 18, 2012 at 7:24 am
Very beautiful... :)
 
Sonza said...
Oct. 15, 2012 at 4:55 am
i like it!!! i dont if u hav written it about yourself or someone else but i think its about me...........  
 
WackyK said...
Oct. 10, 2012 at 12:21 pm
you might be talking about other things but this poem connects to me cause i often take long walks and find myself lost in thoughts and feelings to the point of not really seeing anything around me....deep i like it! wanna see more from u :)
 
BlueSunset said...
Oct. 9, 2012 at 9:05 am
You're very talented! It's awesome, I really love it! x
 
Aegis said...
Oct. 8, 2012 at 9:25 am
In  my opinion, scary. ONly because of the theme that popped in my head. Dark but emotional, neither one is overly done.  I liked it.
 
Songwriter77This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Oct. 7, 2012 at 8:21 am
This is so amazing:) i plainly love it:)
 
compassion said...
Oct. 7, 2012 at 4:44 am
Thats very well composed!
 
hypermagical said...
Oct. 6, 2012 at 1:15 pm
Haunting, reminds of my own work :P Seriously, though, I love this, 5 stars!
 
Freax_of_Nature said...
Oct. 6, 2012 at 10:38 am
really, good..keep it up!  
 
NewsiesfreakThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Oct. 6, 2012 at 10:37 am
I sensed a haunting feeling while i was reading it... I love that with this poem. A journey with no end...It's amazing.
 
AmieEqualsAwesome-ness said...
Oct. 5, 2012 at 9:39 am
Wow! Great job Suri! I loved it. You had such emotion in it. The title is just intriguing. :)
 
IlovemeThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 5, 2012 at 4:51 am
This is so nice, it reminds me of the walks I sometimes take at night. you can't see where you are going, and the road seems never ending.
 
Sarah_is_me replied...
Oct. 5, 2012 at 5:23 am
Very good. Nice scheme and very nice word structure. I loved the first three lines, it set the poem. A great one all around! :D keep it up! 
 
FinnTheHuman replied...
Oct. 5, 2012 at 9:01 am
10/10. I really enjoyed this piece of work. :D
 
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