A Few Haikus

July 29, 2008

By Josh S., Valley Cottage, NY

Deer running rampid
Through the forest painted with
Golden leaves of fall

Ice Crystals Falling
Through the brisk cold winter air
Onto the boys tounge

Frogs on Lilypads
Float Peacefully and let out
A satisfied croak

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RMD said...
Sept. 1, 2008 at 2:35 am

Just a few friendly tips:
1) rampid is not a word
2) "boys" requires an apostrophe
3) "Lilypads" is not one word
4) the plural of haiku is not "haikus" but rather haiku
But other than those innocuous mistakes, your haiku are beautifully simple.