Just One Word MAG

March 26, 2012
By Jokorium SILVER, Union Gap, Washington
Jokorium SILVER, Union Gap, Washington
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Cutting like glass, straight to the bone,
Always bringing pain, pulling me from home,
Left like an island; desolate, alone,
Stinging, like a mace of frosted chrome,
Shot down, like a gun to a bird,
All from the utterance of just one word.

The author's comments:
No matter what is said to a person, I think the things that hurt the most are those one word remarks intended to cut somebody down.

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on May. 10 2012 at 8:12 am
StephanieMorrissa SILVER, Anderson, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"It's not what people call you, it's what you answer to."
-Tyler Perry(Madea)

i like this poem.. it's a very interesting concept.. could you please read some of my stuff?

on Apr. 13 2012 at 7:23 am
loveissmiles GOLD, Lynn, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"I live for the nights I can't remember with the people I will never forget." -Carassisa M-<3

"What the mind can perceive, the body can achieve." -Softball Coach Steve B-

Ohmygosh! This is really good! Like really really good! I love this, and the truth of it reverberates inside my heart. Don't change a thing, this is perfect! If you would please comment/rate some of my work, i would be so happy!

on Apr. 12 2012 at 8:20 pm
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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Favorite Quote:
‎"I’m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don’t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world." - Beyoncé

I've always liked short poems that I can relate to and this is one of them! I love it's meaning and I love the rhymes too. I like the figures of speech too and I like this poem as a whole. Kudos on this!

butterfly123 said...
on Apr. 3 2012 at 11:52 pm
butterfly123, Banglore, Other
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hey! nice one. it is short but so meaningful . i like that .i enjoyed the flow of the poem too. keep writing and great work ! :)

 


on Apr. 3 2012 at 7:59 pm
maizyiscrazy GOLD, Washington, District Of Columbia
10 articles 53 photos 262 comments

Favorite Quote:
I believe in pink. I believe that laughing is the best calorie burner. I believe in kissing, kissing a lot. I believe in being strong when everything seems to be going wrong. I believe in miracles. ~Audrey Hepburn

Sorry, *hits. Whoops!

on Apr. 3 2012 at 7:58 pm
maizyiscrazy GOLD, Washington, District Of Columbia
10 articles 53 photos 262 comments

Favorite Quote:
I believe in pink. I believe that laughing is the best calorie burner. I believe in kissing, kissing a lot. I believe in being strong when everything seems to be going wrong. I believe in miracles. ~Audrey Hepburn

Gosh, this his straight home. This perfectly describes, without it runing on too long, the way it feels to be cut down by someone, by just one word. Five stars!!!

on Mar. 31 2012 at 9:52 am
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"

Wow, this really does show the power of words. I like the way that it ends, sort of abrupt, but not really. Awesome!

dreamshaker said...
on Mar. 30 2012 at 8:16 pm
dreamshaker, Clarkston, Michigan
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I love this  - the description you used was very powerful, and I enjoyed the concept you chose. You really packed every word to the brim with meaning and emotion. The last line was particularly impressive

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on Mar. 30 2012 at 3:30 pm
NickyJ BRONZE, Hyde Park, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“In three words I can sum up everything I've learned about life: it goes on.” ~Robert Frost

This very much reminds me of Slam Poetry. The way it reads in my head has the ring to it. I can totally picture someone reciting this up at a mic and then people snapping their fingers afterword lol

The rhyming is extremely well done and its a joy to read. Simple as that.

on Mar. 30 2012 at 2:59 pm
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt

Yeah this was good. All it takes is one word to emotionally destroy someone---this you have described perfectly. Fantastic~

on Mar. 30 2012 at 8:55 am
SuNshiNe007 ELITE, Magee Ms., Mississippi
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Favorite Quote:
Never Give Up, And Know That God Will Always Love You!

Wow, very creative:) I like it, great Job!




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