Ice Heart

February 23, 2012
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Incased in a shell
Of black, unmoving ice.
Is a heart, my heart
Beating too slow to suffice.
Life goes by fast
For it is easy not to care.
With a heart made of ice,
My world has no one there.
I look in your eyes.
A spark hits my veins.
Like a flame to a fuse,
Like the sunshine on a cloudy day.
What is this I feel?
This tingling in my heart?
Warmth, spreading
Tearing the ice apart.
My heart beating faster,
The ice melted away.
I feel fresh, new
Like the sunrise on a new day.
Shaking, I stand
Take your hand into mine.
Walking to a new world,
With you on my mind.

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DaLemon said...
Apr. 7, 2012 at 7:57 pm
Great job timmy!! :D its lovely I cant believe how amazing ur work is!!!
AgentOrange789 said...
Apr. 5, 2012 at 4:54 pm
Wow. I really liked it. Especially the way the atmosphere changes in the poem. 
Skieler said...
Apr. 1, 2012 at 5:13 pm
nice poem i like it :)
Brinagirl2014 said...
Apr. 1, 2012 at 12:38 pm
i don't even know how to describe that... that was awesome. better than awesome. wow. :)
shadowgirl19 said...
Mar. 10, 2012 at 11:26 pm
its really good. keep writing. :)
BT1718 said...
Mar. 6, 2012 at 8:22 pm

i wish i could rate this higher than a 5 star it was absolutely amazing favorites is where its going for sure keep going


Timpani_Queen said...
Mar. 4, 2012 at 8:31 pm
Thank you to all of you that gave me feedback. You are the people that make me better. I just hope I can impress you more with my later work. Love you guys!
xoSamanthaxo said...
Mar. 4, 2012 at 8:04 pm
I love your poem. You use your words beautifully! Keep writing because you got a lot of talent.
aurum_angel said...
Mar. 4, 2012 at 7:27 pm
Nice job! I feel the same way sometimes, especially last year when I quite literally had no friends. Your poem was so emotional! Loved it!
RunningGinger said...
Mar. 4, 2012 at 6:36 pm
I love it! I've been that cold hearted person for 4 years, and I'm trying,finally, to get over hard times that happened so very long ago. I love your writing! I wish more people could relate to us (writers), or get over their fear of showing the world what they can do. Thank you for being one of those people who have shown the world what you can do! AND. What a WONDERFUL gift you truely have! KEEP WRITING! 
AbigailElizabeth said...
Mar. 4, 2012 at 6:09 pm
very moving and beautiful. keep writing, you're a wonderful poet.
SkinnyDragon said...
Mar. 4, 2012 at 5:37 pm
I've felt the same way, especially this year.  So much stress at school, so I hardened my heart so i wouldn't have to feel it so badly.  But now it's getting better, just like this poem:)  I love it!
bloodroselove said...
Mar. 3, 2012 at 10:00 pm
love it! love does have a way of mending even the most broken, rotten, beatin down heart. i can relate and its very well written awesome poem!
Mike6546 said...
Mar. 3, 2012 at 8:30 pm
Very good, good rhyming and I completely sympathize with it too.
YesThatsWhyTheyFly said...
Mar. 3, 2012 at 8:27 pm
That was wonderful and very refreshing to read! i doubt my work will ever be this good!
NickyJ said...
Mar. 3, 2012 at 8:18 pm

This is definitely written well. I know the feeling of having a heart like ice.

I have to say my favorite part is beginning. "Beating too slow to suffice" is a great line and image.

apensivetapper said...
Mar. 1, 2012 at 4:54 pm
It is beautiful. In fact, it is so advanced, my smallish and immature mind cannot quite comprehend the beauty and true meaning behind it. 5/5 though XD
IamtheshyStargirl said...
Feb. 29, 2012 at 7:37 pm
Your flow and rhyme are enviable, Timpani :) and your story is amazing too :) Thanks for sharing!
OwlEyes6 said...
Feb. 28, 2012 at 6:31 pm
Wow!!!! That was beautiful! I couldn't write that in a million years! I love how the words flowed so well and... beautifully. Great job!
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