Ice Heart

February 23, 2012
By TimmyTiger GOLD, Somewhere, Indiana
TimmyTiger GOLD, Somewhere, Indiana
10 articles 1 photo 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's time to nut up, or shut up." - Woodey Harrelson "Zombieland"


Incased in a shell
Of black, unmoving ice.
Is a heart, my heart
Beating too slow to suffice.
Life goes by fast
For it is easy not to care.
With a heart made of ice,
My world has no one there.
I look in your eyes.
A spark hits my veins.
Like a flame to a fuse,
Like the sunshine on a cloudy day.
What is this I feel?
This tingling in my heart?
Warmth, spreading
Tearing the ice apart.
My heart beating faster,
The ice melted away.
I feel fresh, new
Like the sunrise on a new day.
Shaking, I stand
Take your hand into mine.
Walking to a new world,
With you on my mind.


The author's comments:
I wrote when I as going through a rough time. I saw myself as a mean, ice hearted person. But with the help of my friends, I was able to get out of that. Now I look back and see one of my best pieces of poetry.

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on Apr. 7 2012 at 7:57 pm
Lady_Lemon GOLD, Franklin, Wisconsin
11 articles 1 photo 43 comments
Great job timmy!! :D its lovely I cant believe how amazing ur work is!!!

on Apr. 5 2012 at 4:54 pm
AgentOrange789 GOLD, Friendswood, Texas
16 articles 0 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's a saying they have, that a man has a false heart in his mouth for the world to see, another in his breast to show to his special friends and his family, and the real one, the true one, the secret one, which is never known to anyone except to himself alone, hidden only God knows where."
-James Clavell, "Shogun"

Wow. I really liked it. Especially the way the atmosphere changes in the poem. 

on Apr. 1 2012 at 5:13 pm
SkylerMorningstar GOLD, Barrie, Other
13 articles 1 photo 47 comments
nice poem i like it :)

on Apr. 1 2012 at 12:38 pm
BriRose2014 SILVER, Fremont, Nebraska
9 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A man reserves his true and deepest love not for the species of woman in whose company he finds himself electrified and enkindled, but for that one in whose company he may feel tenderly drowsy."
-George Jean Nathan

i don't even know how to describe that... that was awesome. better than awesome. wow. :)

on Mar. 10 2012 at 11:26 pm
starrynightangel BRONZE, Muscat, Other
1 article 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
Nostalgia is a seductive liar.

its really good. keep writing. :)

on Mar. 6 2012 at 8:22 pm
BT1718 PLATINUM, Worthington, Ohio
24 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
dream as if youll live forever live as if youll die today

i wish i could rate this higher than a 5 star it was absolutely amazing favorites is where its going for sure keep going

 


on Mar. 4 2012 at 8:31 pm
TimmyTiger GOLD, Somewhere, Indiana
10 articles 1 photo 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's time to nut up, or shut up." - Woodey Harrelson "Zombieland"

Thank you to all of you that gave me feedback. You are the people that make me better. I just hope I can impress you more with my later work. Love you guys!

on Mar. 4 2012 at 8:04 pm
xoSamanthaxo GOLD, New York, New York
12 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Forget all the rules. Forget about being published. Write for yourself and celebrate writing."
-Anonymous

I love your poem. You use your words beautifully! Keep writing because you got a lot of talent.

on Mar. 4 2012 at 7:27 pm
aurum_angel BRONZE, Hingham, Massachusetts
3 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
'I’m Nobody! Who are you?
Are you–Nobody–Too?
Then there’s a pair of us!
Don’t tell! they’d advertise–you know!

How dreary–to be–Somebody!
How public–like a Frog-
To tell one’s name–the livelong June-
To an admiring Bog!'
-Emily Dickinson

Nice job! I feel the same way sometimes, especially last year when I quite literally had no friends. Your poem was so emotional! Loved it!

on Mar. 4 2012 at 6:36 pm
Ginga-Ninga GOLD, N/A, Minnesota
13 articles 3 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never Question Yourself. If someone tells you to change, stay exactly who you are. No one should ever try to change you.

I love it! I've been that cold hearted person for 4 years, and I'm trying,finally, to get over hard times that happened so very long ago. I love your writing! I wish more people could relate to us (writers), or get over their fear of showing the world what they can do. Thank you for being one of those people who have shown the world what you can do! AND. What a WONDERFUL gift you truely have! KEEP WRITING! 

on Mar. 4 2012 at 6:09 pm
AbigailElizabeth SILVER, Medina, Minnesota
8 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Scars are souvenirs you never lose" - Goo Goo Dolls

very moving and beautiful. keep writing, you're a wonderful poet.

on Mar. 4 2012 at 5:37 pm
SkinnyDragon BRONZE, Swartz Creek, Michigan
3 articles 7 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
All my life I've looked at words as though I am seeing them for the first time. - Ernest Hemingway

It is the mark of an educated mind to be able to entertain a thought without accepting it.
- Aristotle

I've felt the same way, especially this year.  So much stress at school, so I hardened my heart so i wouldn't have to feel it so badly.  But now it's getting better, just like this poem:)  I love it!

on Mar. 3 2012 at 10:00 pm
bloodroselove SILVER, Spring Mills, Pennsylvania
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love it! love does have a way of mending even the most broken, rotten, beatin down heart. i can relate and its very well written awesome poem!

on Mar. 3 2012 at 8:30 pm
Mike6546 SILVER, North Carolina, North Carolina
6 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
those who mind don\'t matter and those who matter don\'t mind

Very good, good rhyming and I completely sympathize with it too.

on Mar. 3 2012 at 8:27 pm
YesThatsWhyTheyFly SILVER, Concord, North Carolina
5 articles 6 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
'A house divided against itself cannot stand."-Abraham Lincoln

That was wonderful and very refreshing to read! i doubt my work will ever be this good!

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on Mar. 3 2012 at 8:18 pm
NickyJ BRONZE, Hyde Park, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“In three words I can sum up everything I've learned about life: it goes on.” ~Robert Frost

This is definitely written well. I know the feeling of having a heart like ice.

I have to say my favorite part is beginning. "Beating too slow to suffice" is a great line and image.


TapTap SILVER said...
on Mar. 1 2012 at 4:54 pm
TapTap SILVER, New Berlin, Wisconsin
8 articles 0 photos 146 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dream as if you'll live forever, love like there is no tomorrow, dance like there is no one watching.

It is beautiful. In fact, it is so advanced, my smallish and immature mind cannot quite comprehend the beauty and true meaning behind it. 5/5 though XD

on Feb. 29 2012 at 7:37 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Your flow and rhyme are enviable, Timpani :) and your story is amazing too :) Thanks for sharing!

on Feb. 28 2012 at 6:31 pm
OwlEyes6 BRONZE, Gilbert, Arizona
2 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you want your children to be intelligent read them fairytales, if you want them to be more intelligent read them more fairytales."
-Albert Einstein

Wow!!!! That was beautiful! I couldn't write that in a million years! I love how the words flowed so well and... beautifully. Great job!


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