Lost love

February 23, 2012
By Princesspiper84 SILVER, Lodi, New Jersey
Princesspiper84 SILVER, Lodi, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Motto: There's no life without death, mistakes, and missury


Ez had a best friend who's name was Lyu.
And she ended up falling in love with him.
They were the best knights in the kingdom.
They were always sent on a quest cause they worked so well together.
One day that all changed for them.

They were sent to slay a dragon.
They agreed and bowed at the king.
They went to there horses and they rode to the dragons den.
Once they got there the dragon was blowing fire.
Ez grabbed her lovers hand for comfort.
He squeezed it and let go.

He goes in first and they see a wizard with the dragon.
He laughed as he welcomed them to the party.
They both raised there swords.
The wizard only laughed and threw a shock wave at Lyu.
He falls backwards and stumbles over the ledge.

Ez screamed his name several times and ran up to him, he hung on but fell unconscious.
He started to fall then she grabbed onto his hand.
She struggled to get him up and kept praying that he would survive.
The wizard came and whispered in her ear, "Enjoy your gift."
Then he vanished.

She clutched onto him as her face turned red from struggle.
She begged for him to hang on and wake up, but he stood asleep.
She finally got him up from the cliff.
She cried for him to wake up... He just wasn't coming to.
She ran back to the kingdom.

The healers started doing there job once she got there.
She sat outside of the tent waiting for the results.
Her eyes stinging from crying so much.
One of the healers came.
She quickly got up and begged for answers.
He held up his hands and said, "He's in a bad state u can only see him once."
She nodded and walked in.

He was surrounded by tons of preachers praying for him.
She commanded them to get out and so they did.
She kneels right by him and brought her hands to her face.
She prayed, and prayed, and prayed.
The healer said that her time was up and she had to leave.
She clutched onto Lyu's hand and brought it to her chest.
She looked at him and said, "I love you."
She then let go of his hand , got up, and left.

A few weeks later she goes to her favorite spot to meditate still thinking about her love.
Then she sees him.
His hair blowing in the breeze, his sword at his side, and that serious gorgeous face.
She screamed his name and ran up to him.
She gave him a hug and asked so many questions.
What happened?
How was his wounds?
Did he love her back?

He just stares at her in shock and shook his head.
He explained that someone put a spell on him to erase his memory and there was no cure.
She then looked at him her eyes filled tears.
He then asked, "Do i know you?"
She stares at him, thinking what should she tell him.
She then made a big decision that would change her life forever.
"No you don't know me," She stood up. "Excuse me sir i must be going."

She walked down the hill while she felt his heated stare.
Once she was down the hill she ran to a tree that was far away and cried.
She stabbed her sword to the ground and brought her face in her knees.
She just lost her only love in the whole entire world.
What else can she live for now?



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butterfly123 said...
on Mar. 23 2012 at 7:34 am
butterfly123, Banglore, Other
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absloutely loved it! :)

on Mar. 6 2012 at 6:37 pm
I-Love-EDM SILVER, Hamilton, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Pain is the breaking of the shell that encloses your understanding. It is the bitter potion by which the physician within you heals your sick self. Therefore, trust the physician. Drink from its cup of remedy in silence and tranquility.

Wow the creative prettiest poem ever!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

on Mar. 6 2012 at 2:02 pm
futurenovelista SILVER, Staatsburg, New York
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"But I being poor have only my dreams...I place my dreams at your feet. Tread softly for you tread on my dreams." -Yeats

Really good, but I agree with shystargirl...It is more of a short story. Keep on writing!

on Mar. 5 2012 at 8:08 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

This is a great story, but I don't think it really works as a poem, try writing it in short story form. Also, you keep changing from the present to the past tense, that's a bit confusing, just make sure you choose a certain tense in which to work and your poetry will vastly improve. 

Never give up, you have a really great story here, it just needs a little work :)


Joshua. GOLD said...
on Mar. 5 2012 at 6:55 pm
Joshua. GOLD, Las Vegas, Nevada
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"So we shall let the reader answer this question for himself: Who is the happier man, he who has braved the storm of life and lived, or he who has stayed securely on shore and merely existed?" - Hunter S Tompson

Good stuff.

anon12345 said...
on Mar. 3 2012 at 9:12 pm
anon12345, Gys Drive, California
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"If there is a will, there's a way"- Theodore Hertzel

luv it

on Mar. 2 2012 at 11:28 pm
I-Love-EDM SILVER, Hamilton, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Pain is the breaking of the shell that encloses your understanding. It is the bitter potion by which the physician within you heals your sick self. Therefore, trust the physician. Drink from its cup of remedy in silence and tranquility.

so gud!!!!!!!!

jarvis101 said...
on Mar. 2 2012 at 11:27 pm
so gud!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!




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