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Night be my teacher,
Candle be my witness,
Moon be my guide.
Help me see the stars,
And learn of their deepest secrets.
Maneuver me,
Through the twists and turns,
The darkest niches in my mind.
Put the pencil in my hand,
So I may write,
Pull me through
Insanity, so I may
Emerge enlightened, wise.
Teach me, o, secrets I have yet to find,
Witness me, o, my ever burning light,
Guide me, o, beauty I shall never find!



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SongBird04 said...
Jun. 9, 2013 at 9:26 pm
Hmm. This is very different buti love it. :)
 
LunaLives said...
Nov. 30, 2012 at 9:36 pm
Your writing style is so unique. You truly inspire me.
 
Trees said...
Nov. 1, 2012 at 7:22 pm
This was pretty neat!  Great details!  :)
 
DreamsOfGold said...
Mar. 18, 2012 at 6:07 pm
This is really good, Blue. You get every little detail just right. You can even make a dinosuar sound that a little kitten. Meow. Keep up the good work and stay sane. For all out sakes, please.
 
Blue4indigo replied...
Mar. 19, 2012 at 4:17 pm
Haha, thanks! But sorry...I think it's too late for the sanity part :P
 
NickyJ said...
Mar. 12, 2012 at 6:11 pm

While i did like this, it came off as a little cliche, at least to me. But thats being nitpicky.

I do like the first line, but the second line is laying it on thick. "Candle be my witness" is pushing the cliche pretty far, but i like the image/feel it creates. Just a thought.

Also "Moon be my guide" is disasterously cliche XD Probably the most of any line in this poem.

However, I do like your use of declaring "O". I think you have something good going there.
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Blue4indigo replied...
Mar. 12, 2012 at 6:14 pm
Ok, thanks; I'll keep that in mind when I write!
 
HiddenAngelInTheDark said...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 12:24 pm
Welcome, no problem
 
HiddenAngelInTheDark said...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 8:34 am
Amazing and you are right Blue it's questioning yet soft yet awesome ^-^
 
Blue4indigo replied...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 10:10 am
Wow! Thank you!
 
-Ash- said...
Feb. 3, 2012 at 7:40 pm
awesome poem! 5/5 :)
 
Blue4indigo replied...
Feb. 3, 2012 at 7:42 pm
Thank you so much!!
 
rainbowbutterflyThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 3, 2012 at 3:25 pm
thats good :)
 
Blue4indigo replied...
Feb. 3, 2012 at 7:43 pm
Thank you!
 
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