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Mystique

January 26, 2012
By Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott


Night be my teacher,
Candle be my witness,
Moon be my guide.
Help me see the stars,
And learn of their deepest secrets.
Maneuver me,
Through the twists and turns,
The darkest niches in my mind.
Put the pencil in my hand,
So I may write,
Pull me through
Insanity, so I may
Emerge enlightened, wise.
Teach me, o, secrets I have yet to find,
Witness me, o, my ever burning light,
Guide me, o, beauty I shall never find!


The author's comments:
Everybody needs a bit of...mystique in their lives :)

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SongBird04 said...
on Jun. 9 2013 at 9:26 pm
SongBird04, Littleton, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
You've gotta take the good with the bad, smile when you're sad, love what you got and remember what you had. Always forgive but never forget, learn from your mistakes but never regret. People change and things go wrong but always remember life goes on

Hmm. This is very different buti love it. :)

LunaLives GOLD said...
on Nov. 30 2012 at 9:36 pm
LunaLives GOLD, South Bend, Indiana
17 articles 0 photos 237 comments

Favorite Quote:
Because I can!-Me "Life is a choice and death is a decision"-Lil Wayne

Your writing style is so unique. You truly inspire me.

Trees BRONZE said...
on Nov. 1 2012 at 7:22 pm
Trees BRONZE, Billings, Montana
3 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
Everybody wants to go to heaven, but nobody wants to die. How is that?

This was pretty neat!  Great details!  :)

on Mar. 19 2012 at 4:17 pm
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
24 articles 0 photos 382 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

Haha, thanks! But sorry...I think it's too late for the sanity part :P

on Mar. 18 2012 at 6:07 pm
Kit-Kait BRONZE, Amherst, Virginia
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This is really good, Blue. You get every little detail just right. You can even make a dinosuar sound that a little kitten. Meow. Keep up the good work and stay sane. For all out sakes, please.

on Mar. 12 2012 at 6:14 pm
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
24 articles 0 photos 382 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

Ok, thanks; I'll keep that in mind when I write!

NickyJ BRONZE said...
on Mar. 12 2012 at 6:11 pm
NickyJ BRONZE, Hyde Park, New York
1 article 0 photos 138 comments

Favorite Quote:
“In three words I can sum up everything I've learned about life: it goes on.” ~Robert Frost

While i did like this, it came off as a little cliche, at least to me. But thats being nitpicky.

I do like the first line, but the second line is laying it on thick. "Candle be my witness" is pushing the cliche pretty far, but i like the image/feel it creates. Just a thought.

Also "Moon be my guide" is disasterously cliche XD Probably the most of any line in this poem.

However, I do like your use of declaring "O". I think you have something good going there.

Its a good poem and I give it 4/5. The only issue i see here is the cliches, but what teen writing isn't filled with cliche. My only advice for you is to do your best to avoid words and phrases you think sound familiar or ones that aren't taken seriously by time, if that makes sense...Anyways, Good Job! :)


on Feb. 4 2012 at 12:24 pm
HiddenAngelInTheDark PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York
39 articles 0 photos 179 comments

Favorite Quote:
Theres so many that I can't pick sorry

Welcome, no problem

on Feb. 4 2012 at 10:10 am
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
24 articles 0 photos 382 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

Wow! Thank you!

on Feb. 4 2012 at 8:34 am
HiddenAngelInTheDark PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York
39 articles 0 photos 179 comments

Favorite Quote:
Theres so many that I can't pick sorry

Amazing and you are right Blue it's questioning yet soft yet awesome ^-^

on Feb. 3 2012 at 7:43 pm
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
24 articles 0 photos 382 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

Thank you!

on Feb. 3 2012 at 7:42 pm
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
24 articles 0 photos 382 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

Thank you so much!!

-Ash- SILVER said...
on Feb. 3 2012 at 7:40 pm
-Ash- SILVER, Redmond, Washington
7 articles 4 photos 49 comments

Favorite Quote:
She wants to die. She wants to disappear, to be remembered no more. She wants so terribly to be forgotten, all her mistakes, all her failures, everything. Her name to be wiped free from all record of existence. Because is it really existing when you’ve got nothing to show for your life?

awesome poem! 5/5 :)

on Feb. 3 2012 at 3:25 pm
carothesparrow GOLD, Lilburn, Georgia
15 articles 9 photos 249 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont give up she will talk someday my friend made this quote she is really cool cause she understands about my sister
it starts with ONE to make a differerence!!! i learned this quote at a leadership camp

ohana means family no one gets left behind

thats good :)


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