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My Assassination

Life is a knife
Stuck in us all
The more we remove it
The farther we fall
Keep my hand on the handle
Just twist it a bit
Feel my lungs just tremble
Coughing Fit
My breath is a whisper
The pain is a scream
No one is listening
Don’t get what I mean
My legs were just shaking
I fall on my knees
All you people just stab me
A thousand bees
I plunge the knife deeper
Your raising the blade
Sunshine is fading
You welcome the shade
The blade swings
I dodge it, And fall
My death isn’t noticed
Uncared for by all



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HiddenAngelInTheDarkThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 8:59 am:
Another master piece my friend :) great work and it's like those people betrayed you and stabbed you but you dodge the knife and let yourself go instead
 
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Vivacious said...
Feb. 2, 2012 at 8:54 pm:
What is your connection with bee metaphors? The peice is great but honey, maybe you could add in a whole lot more descriptive words if ur not only trying to rhyme. Also, don't say "just" so much. Really amazing work thp
 
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Photographywonder said...
Jan. 20, 2012 at 11:00 pm:
Im reading all your poems. This is great also! We should collaborate one day on a poem together :)
 
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cookiestar said...
Jan. 19, 2012 at 6:58 am:
I love this:). I love the way u express ur emotions. This is an amazing poem, and beautifully written. Good Job!
 
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Catniss22This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 18, 2012 at 5:56 pm:
I love this. it shows that people ignore things that go on around them. comparing life with death. Wonderful!
 
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chloe_garrettThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 18, 2012 at 8:54 am:
i love this. love u rr.
 
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poetidea_myworld_22 said...
Jan. 18, 2012 at 6:46 am:
loved it :)
 
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Jadafunk said...
Jan. 17, 2012 at 6:04 am:
i really like it and the comparison you made!
 
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Silver2blackThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 17, 2012 at 5:44 am:
Wow, I love it my fave, I like the rhyme, flow,emotions and the feelings...5/5 !
 
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XxTickleM3EmoxX This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 15, 2012 at 4:31 pm:
... AMAZING! please keep writing... its now one of my favorites! :D
 
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Sarah Y. This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 14, 2012 at 6:37 pm:
Written with such emotion! It sounded as if it was written by Robert Frost himself, it just flowed so smoothly. I give it a six out of five :P.
 
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pixxielove said...
Jan. 14, 2012 at 10:39 am:
i like it... good flow 5/5
 
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Frankietxter said...
Jan. 12, 2012 at 6:53 pm:
I love it. this is amazing and very deep in emotion.
 
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Fizza_98 said...
Jan. 11, 2012 at 6:37 am:
very good poem. I love the way u put the emotions in it. 5/5 stars. :)
 
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hotshot said...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 9:24 pm:
this was very deep emotion for a poem to be made from. and all i got to say is you bought it, owned it, and sold it. terriffic
 
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alligator6 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 9:14 pm:
this poem is wonderful. i love the word choice. nice job!
 
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browneyez16 said...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 7:31 pm:
Wonderful rhyme scheme. I'm forever stressed so I really get this poem.
 
scenesoccerqueen replied...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 7:49 pm :
I feel like i can so relate..painfullly beautiful!
 
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recurring_resilience said...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 7:25 pm:
It's funny how you say that about the forced part! When I was writing i was just trying to make it flow right; not rhyme! Anyway I hope you ditch the stress soon! :D
 
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Acastillo said...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 7:18 pm:
Wow I really liked it, I'm under tons of stress right now so I can relate in a way. I liked that the rhymes didnt sound forced, nice job! :)
 
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