Caught In the Undertow

January 5, 2012
By n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur


Im Caught in the undertow
That's one thing I do know,
What I don't know is how to get out
And until then I'm left tumbling about,
Feeling like I'm drowning, going further down with each blow,
Floating in the deep ole blue...
stuck out here without a clue,
No idea how to get back to shore-
Tiring out, heart aching and chest sore,
Won't someone just throw out a life saver?-
Something i thought you were!
Tossed back and forth with every swell
Don't know if I'll make it out well,
Or alive at all
How for you did I ever fall?
Now there's no way out of this hell
And thanks to you I'm now stuck in these rolling swells!
And I'll be drifting away
Until the day
Someone comes to rescue me-
From all this pain and misery,
No longer will I feel like I'm drowning
No longer need to feel like dying!


The author's comments:
When I think of something I HAVE to write it down, and this is one of those poems one line just followed the first and then the next came and so on...the result? Caught in the Undertow:P

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on Feb. 2 2012 at 7:03 pm
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

thanks! And of course i will!

on Feb. 2 2012 at 5:50 pm
HopefullyTrue BRONZE, East New Market, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"one day your life will pass through your eyes. make it worth waching"- unknown

Very good I enjoyed your ryme sceme. would you mind cheaking out mine. Its called Live and Die. Thanks soo much.


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