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Cause I'm Still Young

January 4, 2012
By n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur


How can I know all that's right
Yet give into wrong without a fight?
Raised up to be the best
Yet end up lost just like the rest,
Taught to stand strong
But Knocked down not before long,
Shown how to live my life accordingly-
Though somehow it just doesn't work for me.
Rebellion can't fully be it
Cause nothing I do, do I do just for the heck of it,
It's just something new, and worth trying-
Though in some cases you feel like you're dying!
And why after all these years
By my actions am I never brought to tears?
Cause I don't care, and never will?
Or just cause I'm young still?
Hurting those who love me the most
Mainly by the things that I've chose-
To do, to speak, and how to live
Still not listening even after all the lessons life is willing to give-
I still do what I want even if i know it's wrong
And somehow end up worse than before not before long.


The author's comments:
I wrote this during a time where everything seem to be going down hill, and I would always ask myself how the heck did I end up here?

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on Mar. 21 2014 at 12:04 pm
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

Thank you, it was written during an emotional time so I appreciate the facat you could feel that. 

on Feb. 1 2013 at 9:38 am
Sakuya PLATINUM, Richmond, Virginia
39 articles 12 photos 63 comments
This has really nice emotions to it and your description does all the talking for you which I love

on Jan. 31 2013 at 9:57 pm
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

Thank You!

on Jan. 31 2013 at 3:49 pm
nakubara PLATINUM, Belvidere, New Jersey
27 articles 18 photos 84 comments

Favorite Quote:
Everything you do in life is insignificant, but its important you do it anyway ~Ghandi

Greatt poem! good emotion. keep up the nice work! 

on Jan. 31 2013 at 3:47 pm
Rolledthestone SILVER, Nowhere, Other
8 articles 0 photos 108 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You hypocrite, first take the plank out of your own eye, and then you will see clearly to remove the speck from your brother’s eye." (Matthew 7:5) and "All the poeple who supported slavery were free, all the people who support abortion live..."

Really like scenesoccerqueen, keep writing awesome poetry, it was...splenderific.

on Jan. 31 2013 at 3:45 pm
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

Thank you. so was yours. It was written in no other format ive seen. Talent!

on Jan. 31 2013 at 3:42 pm
nightrunner23 PLATINUM, Greene, New York
33 articles 0 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you treat me like a princess, I'll treat you like a prince.
If you treat me like a game, I'll show you how it's played.

This is really emotional and relateable, AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

on Sep. 29 2012 at 10:08 am
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

why thank you, im glad you could find a connecting point. Yes, I agree some strong adjectives or verbs could make it more vibrant. I was actually considering revising it later:) Thanks for the feedback!

on May. 27 2012 at 8:29 pm
DreamingOutQuiet SILVER, Round Rock, Texas
7 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Time and the bell have buried the day,
The black cloud carries the sun away" - Elliot

Oh if life where made of moments, even now and then a bad one. Oh, if life where made of moments then we wouldn't know we had one. - Into the Woods

I usually dont connect to poems that rhyme. But the rythm and emotion where both kept well. I think some stronger words would help portray the feelings better, though. This one is a keeper.

on Feb. 21 2012 at 7:52 am
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

Thanks I'm glad you think so:)

on Feb. 21 2012 at 7:45 am
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

Thank you! I appreciate your encouragment and the fact you read my poem:) Thanks!

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on Feb. 19 2012 at 11:26 pm
Just_Jill GOLD, Gallipolis Ferry, West Virginia
16 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
Courage is not a lack of fear, it is acting despite the fear.

I enjoyed that your poem felt like it had some personal, I don't know, feeling in it, I've read some that, yeah, they rhymed and had good rhythm, but that was it, there wasn't much personal meaning behind it, and yours did, if that makes any sense, anyway, good job. :)

on Feb. 12 2012 at 7:19 pm
Plain-Jane ELITE, Grandview, Missouri
108 articles 2 photos 76 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And the Lamb at the center of the throne will be their Shepherd. He will guide them to springs of living water; and God will wipe away every tear from their eyes." Revelation 7:17

so true for a lot of us. good poem

on Feb. 5 2012 at 4:00 pm
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

Thanks for checking it out!

on Feb. 5 2012 at 3:50 pm
roguemilk BRONZE, Henderson, Nevada
3 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
You are remembered by the rules you break, but not the rules you follow

I love the Rhythm

on Feb. 3 2012 at 8:05 am
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

Wow thats really encouraging! Ive read a few good ones on here too! And thank you:)

on Feb. 3 2012 at 7:54 am
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

Aww thanks but no I dont think 20 times better, in fact I dont think its better! lol everyone has their own writing styles, topics and ways of putting the two together...thanks for reading:)

on Feb. 3 2012 at 7:43 am
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

Thank you!!

on Feb. 2 2012 at 7:54 pm
C.K.Snow SILVER, Morden, Other
6 articles 10 photos 73 comments
Wow. This is a very good poem. Well done!

on Feb. 2 2012 at 7:41 pm
AllenStovall PLATINUM, Port Lavaca, Texas
23 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"two things are infinate, the universe and human stupidity, and im still not sure about the universe"
albert einstein

really amazing you actually just inspired me to right better cuz looking at yours ande looking at my poetry yours is 20 times better than mine thnks for the motivation!


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