The Zone

December 31, 2011
By artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
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Sleepless nights, tight nights
Hours awake and no sleep I can bake
To me it’s just a lake
The return of the pale

Every year
I hear the same breeze
I see the same dreams
I feel the same scene

And also the thought is not gone
I know this is low thinking
That someday my mind will blow away
And flow to the north
But it’s okay
Because I’ll be graved in my favourite zone


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on Jun. 13 2014 at 10:19 am
Sunshine2420 SILVER, Unknown, Other
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Favorite Quote:
A smile hides everything.

Its just fabulous...I love it ;)

on Jan. 31 2012 at 4:12 pm
artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
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lol, tnx team, if u want i ll send a description

on Jan. 31 2012 at 12:42 pm
Zaraclaylime DIAMOND, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
So I suppose my simple advice is: Love your life. I only say that because your life is what you have to give.
-Tom Hiddleston

didnt understand it, but it sounded pretty

on Jan. 30 2012 at 10:22 pm
artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
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tnx, skieler

on Jan. 30 2012 at 10:21 pm
SkylerMorningstar GOLD, Barrie, Other
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i liked it

on Jan. 29 2012 at 9:46 pm
QuietMusician BRONZE, Wheelock, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
“If I discover within myself a desire which no experience in this world can satisfy, the most probable explanation is that I was made for another world.”
C.S. Lewis

I like it. It is really peaceful to read :) i

on Jan. 28 2012 at 1:26 pm
artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
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tnx, i ll keep it in mind,

on Jan. 28 2012 at 1:25 pm
rockmafia-611 BRONZE, Oran, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"There are multiple sides to all of us.Who we are and who we might be if we follow our dreams"
Miley Cyrus(Miles to go)

it's nice but it could be better.keep on writing :)

on Jan. 28 2012 at 12:57 pm
artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
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tnx, really appreciate it

on Jan. 28 2012 at 12:56 pm
lucybrown SILVER, Blacksburg, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
The wastebasket is a writer's best friend. ~Isaac Bashevis Singer

First things first, but not necessarily in that order. ~ From Doctor Who

I liked the words you used in this piece. It is very interesting and you did a great job. Keep writing!

on Jan. 24 2012 at 9:06 pm
artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
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tnx, daph, will keep it in mind

daph199 SILVER said...
on Jan. 24 2012 at 9:03 pm
daph199 SILVER, Burlington, New Jersey
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For constructive criticism, I would say to watch out for clichés with your next poem. like "sleepless nights." maybe find another way to describe the nights without saying sleepless but implying that these nights went without sleep. it's interesting though. at least the way it ends is interesting. it's another light read :)

on Jan. 22 2012 at 8:26 pm
artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
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tnx, glad u liked it

on Jan. 22 2012 at 8:25 pm
artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
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tnx, caligirl

on Jan. 22 2012 at 8:24 pm
artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
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tnx wonderment, btw i like the word u used ; airy, lol

on Jan. 22 2012 at 8:23 pm
artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
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tnx, glad u liked it

on Jan. 22 2012 at 8:22 pm
artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
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tnx , 4 the feedback, we ll keep in in mind

on Jan. 22 2012 at 8:21 pm
artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
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tnx, glad u liked it

on Jan. 22 2012 at 8:20 pm
artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
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tnk u very much, glad u liked it

Shmelmo GOLD said...
on Jan. 22 2012 at 8:06 pm
Shmelmo GOLD, Elma, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
You never know how strong you are until being strong is the only choice you have.

Very cool - I like your way of wording! Keep writing! PS - thanks for commenting on my poem! :)


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