The Zone

December 31, 2011
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Sleepless nights, tight nights
Hours awake and no sleep I can bake
To me it’s just a lake
The return of the pale

Every year
I hear the same breeze
I see the same dreams
I feel the same scene

And also the thought is not gone
I know this is low thinking
That someday my mind will blow away
And flow to the north
But it’s okay
Because I’ll be graved in my favourite zone

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Itsme24 said...
Jun. 13, 2014 at 10:19 am
Its just fabulous...I love it ;)
team_haymitch This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 31, 2012 at 12:42 pm
didnt understand it, but it sounded pretty
artmantist replied...
Jan. 31, 2012 at 4:12 pm
lol, tnx team, if u want i ll send a description
Skieler said...
Jan. 30, 2012 at 10:21 pm
i liked it
artmantist replied...
Jan. 30, 2012 at 10:22 pm
tnx, skieler
QuietMusician said...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 9:46 pm
I like it. It is really peaceful to read :) i
rockmafia-611 said...
Jan. 28, 2012 at 1:25 pm
it's nice but it could be better.keep on writing :)
artmantist replied...
Jan. 28, 2012 at 1:26 pm
tnx, i ll keep it in mind,
lucybrown said...
Jan. 28, 2012 at 12:56 pm
I liked the words you used in this piece. It is very interesting and you did a great job. Keep writing!
artmantist replied...
Jan. 28, 2012 at 12:57 pm
tnx, really appreciate it
daph199 said...
Jan. 24, 2012 at 9:03 pm
For constructive criticism, I would say to watch out for clichés with your next poem. like "sleepless nights." maybe find another way to describe the nights without saying sleepless but implying that these nights went without sleep. it's interesting though. at least the way it ends is interesting. it's another light read :)
artmantist replied...
Jan. 24, 2012 at 9:06 pm
tnx, daph, will keep it in mind
Shmelmo said...
Jan. 22, 2012 at 8:06 pm
Very cool - I like your way of wording! Keep writing! PS - thanks for commenting on my poem! :)
artmantist replied...
Jan. 22, 2012 at 8:26 pm
tnx, glad u liked it
CaliGirl20 said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 9:55 pm
i really like it.. its very descriptive
artmantist replied...
Jan. 22, 2012 at 8:25 pm
tnx, caligirl
Wonderment said...
Jan. 13, 2012 at 9:21 pm
I like it. It's airy and feels like a breeze. Nice
artmantist replied...
Jan. 22, 2012 at 8:24 pm
tnx wonderment, btw i like the word u used ; airy, lol
brokedownandlonely said...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 6:59 pm
it made me feel like i was the one involved good job
artmantist replied...
Jan. 22, 2012 at 8:23 pm
tnx, glad u liked it
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