The Creature of Merr

December 19, 2011
There lived a creature, so horrid and vile.
In the land of Merr, so fertile an isle.
The beast was armed with venom and claw,
A ton of teeth fitting crooked in it's yawning maw.
It hunted the living and haunted the night
Always lurking at the edge of waning firelight.
It gobbled up children, elders, priests and more.
There was little the monster didn't like to devour.

Eyes long since cast fell on a dipping sun,
And for these sad people their hope was none.
Smoke twisted into a tyrant's crown,
The monster emerged to finish the town.
But a lone form stood firm amidst the chaos and the cries.
A frail woman with determination burning strong in her eyes.
She lifted a sword to challenge the beast, drawing a line on the ground.
It growled and padded the earth as it sized up this creature of little renown.
"On this day, I shall send you on to your end!"
The beast charged, and she rose her blade up to defend.
She parried and countered with exceptional skill,
And at long last she rose her blade up over the beast to claim her kill.
Its monstrous head rolled off in a satisfying spurt of arterial spray,
and all of Merr celebrated that day.

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Ashley_Tucker said...
Apr. 25, 2012 at 2:37 pm

This is excellent! One of the best I've ever seen on here to be honest. I couldn't find something that needed to be fixed if my life depended on it. I'm rating you five stars!

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indimcmathz said...
Feb. 23, 2012 at 11:23 pm
nice, i like it :)
AgentOrange789 said...
Feb. 9, 2012 at 10:56 pm
Nice! Reminds me of Beowulf. The poem, not the movie. ;)
-Kal- said...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 2:37 pm
It reminds me of King Arthur.... I wonder why.... Lol :) Again, good job writing :)
thefamoustapper said...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 10:22 pm
Woah, this word choice and overall view and idea of the poem is way above my level. What i can tell from it, is that its very well written and has a message that can be interperated in many ways. LOVE IT keep writing ;)
Dweathermankort This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 31, 2011 at 2:46 am
Overall, the rhyming here is nothing short of brilliant. You've shown great command of that skill, and the second stanza is really powerful, as well. In terms of changing this if you are interested in editing, the first stanza may be a little slow to develop and slightly redundant. I enjoyed this though. The themes were really apparent, though subtly put. Great work and please keep writing :)
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