Cambio Network
Magazine, website & books written by teens since 1989

Daddy's Womb Magazine

By
i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

Magazine This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




You might be interested in this content from TeenSpot:


Join the Discussion


This article has 1499 comments. Post your own!

vail09VIP said...
Feb. 8 at 1:12 pm:

that was wonderful...may i ask what inspired you?

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
BraxtonLangstonChapman said...
Feb. 8 at 12:24 pm:

This is really good and I want to get to this level, can someone judge some of my poetry and tell me something I need to work on.

 
vail09VIP replied...
Feb. 8 at 1:14 pm :

ill do it if you wish. before hand i want to say..im not a rude person if i dont like something ill tell it easily

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
NickyJ said...
Feb. 6 at 9:08 pm:

We need more poetry like this floating around.

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
ryanryanryan said...
Feb. 6 at 2:40 pm:

This was exremely well written and had great imagery.

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
ThinkGeek72 said...
Feb. 6 at 2:40 pm:

Very interesting and different! I loved it!

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Alyssa897 said...
Feb. 6 at 2:35 pm:

Great imagry and overall really well writen!

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
ImCoolerThanYou said...
Feb. 6 at 2:33 pm:

Very very well written. Great imagery and good details. You can see it in your mind.

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
ryanryanryan said...
Feb. 6 at 2:30 pm:

very well written, has good imagery, amazing flow

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Slafyg said...
Feb. 6 at 9:47 am:

Nice imagery

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
tdotcooley said...
Feb. 6 at 9:39 am:

Very well written and relates to many important realizations in life.

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Lillie M. VIP said...
Feb. 6 at 4:30 am:

So amazing! This can relate to a lot of different situations, you've written it so well that people can view it in their own ways.

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Blacknblue_kissez said...
Feb. 5 at 12:06 pm:

This poem is filled with imagery, it's so vivid and beautiful. I can see a warm summers day, and a boy trying to prove his father wrong. I love this.

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
White_Trash843VIP said...
Feb. 3 at 4:18 am:

Great poem i wish i could be as good as you are and congrats on the mag i hope you keep writing!

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Labyrinth said...
Jan. 30 at 2:36 pm:

It is very good. And where do you get off saying it's "DREADFUL"??? I think you have no eye for poetry. V_V

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
AlexisNicole822VIP said...
Jan. 29 at 7:58 pm:

The flow was incredible, and I loved how it gives the reader different ways to view it. Mind blown(:

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
HisMinx said...
Jan. 29 at 7:14 pm:

this is amazing!

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Jen_Vargas said...
Jan. 29 at 4:09 pm:

Hm... it was interesting... the ending was a bit confusing though...

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
zhlenVIP said...
Jan. 26 at 12:14 pm:

Because it is very good, the context is well written and the rhythm is smooth. How did your comment get published? :O

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Luna557VIP said...
Feb. 3 at 11:03 pm:

This made me smile.

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Bat-MobileVIP said...
Jan. 26 at 4:17 am:

love it, great rhythm

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
brokedownandlonelyVIP said...
Jan. 24 at 8:58 pm:

great poem

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
hannah.mariaVIP said...
Jan. 24 at 6:11 pm:

great poem. i really like the theme, and the rhyming is clever and cute. phrasing could be improved, though. great work, keep it up!

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Snoopy12VIP said...
Jan. 23 at 6:26 pm:

Great work! It's so true and beautifully written. Thank you so much for creating this. I absolutely love it when people write poems that are true to life (though fantasy is all right). We can all relate to it and grow off of it. Again, thank you for writing this!

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
blubird17 said...
Jan. 22 at 4:39 pm:

This is awesome! Keep on writing!

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
stanza1VIP said...
Jan. 22 at 10:17 am:

very very nice

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
ScarlettJones said...
Jan. 21 at 6:31 am:

I adore this poem, it tells how we are always restrained by our elders, and it relates to everyone :)

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
RainyWriterVIP said...
Jan. 19 at 8:08 pm:

Adults are always telling us we can do whatever we want, be whatever we want. But really, we can't always. And they're always trying to control. Usually anyway. I love the double meaning in this poem, and it could be interpreted in so many ways. I also like that it's short and sweet. Keep it up.

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
samuel_wolf_nightwingVIP said...
Jan. 19 at 8:38 am:

this is very well written and true. adults of today try and chain us to the ground so we may never soar with the birds, i comend you and putting this truth in a poem. i hope to read more from you later on.

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
EthanCalhounVIP said...
Jan. 18 at 4:34 pm:

painted a great picture, very well written, i really enjoyed

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
ReganVIP said...
Jan. 18 at 2:19 pm:

I AM IN LOVE WITH THIS POEM!

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
BeccaKokoVIP said...
Jan. 16 at 11:09 am:

Really good meaning! It definelty left me thinking.... btws anybody feel free to check out some of my work! please leave comments and rate! thanks!

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Metal_MulishaVIP said...
Jan. 15 at 10:21 am:

not sure what to say,I liked it but it was kind of short and straight to the point way to soon.

 
Tman219 replied...
Jan. 19 at 1:05 pm :

i liked this poem and its meaning!!!!!!!!

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
chloe_garrettVIP said...
Jan. 14 at 5:44 pm:

I really like this poem and the way you talk about being bound to the earth by your fatherThis is a really great poem. keep writing. I write poetry too.

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
marisol21 said...
Jan. 12 at 10:13 pm:

This is great. I like the title. You should read mine.

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
KatherineKilljoyVIP said...
Jan. 12 at 9:22 am:

I loved it.

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
jusc44 said...
Jan. 11 at 11:45 am:

This is amazing! Check out my Poem " Our Love" Thanks(:

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
laverneVIP said...
Jan. 9 at 2:25 pm:

that was great..! i would love for you to read mine.

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Mimi15VIP said...
Jan. 7 at 3:04 pm:

Check out my poem 'On our Own'

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
expressionconfessionVIP said...
Jan. 6 at 11:42 pm:

like the title, love the construction of the metaphor. all awesome! however i'd caution you to watch your rhyme scheme... if you read this out loud to yourself you will feel that some lines seem to short/long and a few easy word changes would smooth the flow

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Barbara C. said...
Jan. 3 at 7:20 pm:

this is incredible! well done

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
HagenDazzleVIP said...
Jan. 2 at 11:15 pm:

Lovely poem! I agree with the meaning of the title and how it ties into the essence of a father's love (that's what I view from your piece) Keep up the great work!

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Shayla C. said...
Jan. 2 at 5:05 pm:

This is beautiful ! I think this is a well thoughted and was put out very well .. Im very impressed !! :D

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Erebus_Wildfire said...
Jan. 2 at 9:05 am:

I agree and what explain the meaning of the title

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Erebus_Wildfire said...
Jan. 2 at 9:04 am:

this piece is good the structure of it is not bad and even when giving a regular post you should always be sure have punctuation

 
Luna557VIP replied...
Jan. 6 at 8:46 pm :

See, i disagree about the punctuation comment, in a free verse poem you can do whatever you wish with the punctuation. Just look at e. e. cummings :)

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
shmam7624VIP said...
Jan. 1 at 8:01 pm:

Love it! I keep reading it over and over again.

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
vazenitran98VIP said...
Dec. 28, 2011 at 11:03 am:

Amazing. You are very talented.

 
TawnyNerd1995VIP replied...
Jan. 1 at 9:13 am :

paints a wonderful picture.

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment