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By Carl H., Staten Island, NY
Photo credit: Matthew S., Sharon, MA
i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.
This piece has been published in Teen Ink's monthly print magazine.This piece has also been published in Teen Ink's monthly print magazine.

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Doyouhavetheories said...
yesterday at 7:13 am:

This poem is practically exploding with emotions, and so little words to describe them. I love it.

 
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SolvoAnimus said...
Mar. 19 at 3:00 am:

New York! REPRESENT! lol

 
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rh423 said...
Mar. 19 at 12:52 am:

this was good! i feel like it would be good as lyrics

 
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robert5512344 said...
Mar. 18 at 9:16 am:

that was terrible

 
BleedingRose replied...
Mar. 18 at 10:52 am :

I didn't think so. You comments are supposed to be constructive, would you at least say why you didn't like this? everyone has different tastes.

 
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Shabanana said...
Mar. 17 at 11:04 am:

I really enjoyed so poem so thank you!! I wrote a poem also about people not understanding how important family and friends are and it is also very deep. Check it out i think you might like it. its called Reflections.

 
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yesimdarrian101 said...
Mar. 15 at 5:28 pm:

I thought this poem was incredible. I can really relate to feeling like my parents are encouraging me, yet holding me back at the same time. amazing job. :)

 
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Bree14 said...
Mar. 15 at 3:45 pm:

Great job!!!!!

 
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OliviaMiaKing said...
Mar. 15 at 3:20 pm:

Wonderful.

 
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awesome said...
Mar. 15 at 9:05 am:

This is an awesome

 
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Lisha said...
Mar. 14 at 9:38 am:

Beautiful :)

 
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nash4prez said...
Mar. 13 at 8:40 pm:

raise cancer awareness! check out some of my posts!

 
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Alexis M. said...
Mar. 13 at 11:03 am:

This poem is really good you are very poetic

 
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starlight26:) said...
Mar. 13 at 10:24 am:

Beautiful Poem!!! I loved It!!!

 
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aspiring.author.09 said...
Mar. 11 at 6:40 pm:

I do not understand this poem...could someone summarize/explain?

 
JohnO. replied...
Mar. 13 at 9:18 am :

The key is in the title. Yes, this poem is a little strange. But the "bound" part is like the placenta in the womb. He does this weird change up from talking about jumping off the edge to being in the womb. It's....different.

 
aspiring.author.09 replied...
Mar. 13 at 1:08 pm :

Thank you for your help. I love the uniqueness of this poem and your explanation has helped me to further enjoy it. :)

 
JohnO. replied...
Mar. 13 at 3:34 pm :

welcome. :) Hopefull one of my poems will be up here.

 
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bubblebuttjoe said...
Mar. 11 at 1:57 pm:

i didnt think that this was the best i think the end was like really weird ahahah:)

 
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Iferrer said...
Mar. 11 at 12:09 pm:

I like this poem, the ways that you show of how encouraging your father can be to your interests is very cool.

 
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BOBRETSMITH said...
Mar. 11 at 10:13 am:

we have to break free from what our parents tell us to do, and make our own path in life.

 
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bobjoe said...
Mar. 11 at 10:09 am:

this poem has a lot of meaning. It shows how parents encourage you but still hold you back

 
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hahaha said...
Mar. 11 at 10:05 am:

i think that i like this because the dad was being honest with his daughter

 
Shabanana replied...
Mar. 17 at 11:00 am :

its the son not the daughter

 
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perry the platupus said...
Mar. 11 at 10:02 am:

this poem made me want to cry deeply in the cry cry

 
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sassypoet555 said...
Mar. 11 at 10:02 am:

Very good use of symbolism throughout your poem.

 
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timmyb said...
Mar. 11 at 10:02 am:

this is so true

 
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bigpapa said...
Mar. 11 at 10:00 am:

This is AMAZING!!!!!!! keep up the good poems!!!

 
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joshow said...
Mar. 11 at 9:57 am:

this is a great poem

 
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allie.vgr1994 said...
Mar. 10 at 7:53 am:

It was really good!!!!!! I really love people who express their feelings in that way!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥

 
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LaReSt said...
Mar. 9 at 6:56 am:

This is one of the best poems I have read. Good Job!!!

 
allie.vgr1994 replied...
Mar. 10 at 7:57 am :

I think it was one of the greatest things ever!!!!!! Have you writen anything like this?

 
LaReSt replied...
Mar. 10 at 10:05 am :

I have but it is a religious one. I am wating to see my work get published here. Hopefully it will be soon.

 
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chrissmd said...
Mar. 8 at 9:40 pm:

this is so good... i love the symbolism you used. great job!

 
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writergirl914 said...
Mar. 8 at 4:35 pm:

I really like it. And apparently so does everyone else. 473??!! Keep up the good work!

 
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adam17 said...
Mar. 8 at 11:45 am:

i dont get it

 
LaReSt replied...
Mar. 9 at 6:58 am :

It's saying how a parent can tell you you can do anything and/or be anything but in the end they are the ones who try to hold you back be it for a reason like they aren't ready for you to go or selfish reasons.

 
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CHEERLEADER~4~life said...
Mar. 8 at 9:03 am:

i really liked your poem...keep up the good work!!!!
:D

 
allie.vgr1994 replied...
Mar. 10 at 7:55 am :

Yeah it was great I would agree!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥

 
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LostChild said...
Mar. 6 at 9:08 am:

Your poem was very visual the picture of a boy wanting to go beyond grounds but at the end you was bound heck ima be able to write like this amazing keep it up

 
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MariaMarie said...
Mar. 4 at 7:51 pm:

I really love this, cool. It flows together good and the imaginary is awesome! :)

 
peace.frog.271 replied...
Mar. 7 at 8:47 pm :

er... imaginary, or imagery? sorry, I have a sick case of OCD.. hehe

 
MariaMarie replied...
Mar. 8 at 4:25 pm :

lol, it's ok. Imagery is good

 
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Ralin said...
Mar. 4 at 4:28 pm:

i thought that your piece is beautifully put together. i love the way you let your thoughts out on paper... or online lol like i do. u should try to enter in on a contest

 
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liblib33 said...
Mar. 3 at 8:28 pm:

I could only wish to write something like this. Great job!!!!

 
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crisscross said...
Mar. 3 at 7:18 pm:

its amazing your deep concept on life the grasp you have on it the view you see your poem in i dont know but in my minds eye as i read i saw a embodied adult ready to flee ready to become successful ready to be one on his own but as our ties to our parents emotional most causes us to linger around a bit.

 
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ladycasanova said...
Mar. 3 at 5:20 pm:

I think that this poem is about growing up and wanting your own life and independence. I can really connect with it.

 
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Teen13 said...
Mar. 3 at 3:09 pm:

I wish I could write a piece like this, honestly I couldn't follow on what was happening but it was deep and amazing, wonderful job!

 
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kujo96 said...
Mar. 2 at 3:19 pm:

very nice i like tht u r bound

 
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alpinestars976 said...
Mar. 2 at 10:56 am:

Awesome poem!

 
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