Just Maybe

November 21, 2011
By Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And when I'm gone, just carry on, don't mourn
Rejoice every time you hear the sound of my voice
Just know that I'm looking down on you smiling
And I didn't feel a thing, So baby don't feel my pain
Just smile back"-Eminem


I saw you in the store the other day
Our eyes met and then you looked away
When suddenly I got the urge to say
“My name’s Jacob, how ya doin’, hey.”


Unsure what to do, I looked all about
Breathing slowly- in and out, in and out
I moved closer and decided to say hello,
But then you turn to talk to some fellow


Our eyes met again- if only for an instant;
I tried to figure out what that face meant
As I stood there, thinking, away you went
And then you were gone, and that was it.


I couldn’t help but keep on wondering
My mind kept racing, thinking, pondering
But were we in fact destined to meet?
Probably not, but maybe, just maybe.


The author's comments:
True story. This actually happened to me in a Fleet Farm (those of you from North Dakota to Michigan know what that is) the other day. I guess writing this poem was the only way to get it off my mind. I really think I was supposed to talk to this girl I saw- almost like God was leading me to say something- but for whatever reason I couldn't. I could see pain in her eyes, and written all over her face- I just wish I could have done something about it.

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on Dec. 19 2011 at 1:28 pm
Kparker27 PLATINUM, Groesbeck, Texas
30 articles 17 photos 101 comments

Favorite Quote:
"In the end, it's still best to wait for the one we want rather than settle for what's available. It's still best to wait for the one you love rather than to settle for the one who's around. It's still best to wait for the right person, because life's too short to waste on the wrong one."

I like it :)

 


Tiggerlily14 said...
on Dec. 7 2011 at 12:52 pm
:(  hey, it's better than any poem I have ever written!  when I was in like, 1st grade, I wrote a poem about macaroni and cheese :P  now that is a failure!

on Dec. 7 2011 at 12:49 pm
Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And when I'm gone, just carry on, don't mourn
Rejoice every time you hear the sound of my voice
Just know that I'm looking down on you smiling
And I didn't feel a thing, So baby don't feel my pain
Just smile back"-Eminem

This is like, the worst poem I've ever written, except for some failed songs.

Tiggerlily14 said...
on Dec. 7 2011 at 8:52 am
:-/ why do you say that?  it's good!

on Dec. 6 2011 at 7:24 pm
Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And when I'm gone, just carry on, don't mourn
Rejoice every time you hear the sound of my voice
Just know that I'm looking down on you smiling
And I didn't feel a thing, So baby don't feel my pain
Just smile back"-Eminem

Huh, I guess I never commented when this hit 250 views.  Anyways, still five stars on this piece of cr.ap.

on Dec. 5 2011 at 10:42 am
Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And when I'm gone, just carry on, don't mourn
Rejoice every time you hear the sound of my voice
Just know that I'm looking down on you smiling
And I didn't feel a thing, So baby don't feel my pain
Just smile back"-Eminem

Sure, I can do that.

Risible SILVER said...
on Dec. 2 2011 at 4:39 pm
Risible SILVER, Norwalk, Connecticut
7 articles 0 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Sooner or later, those who win are those who think they can." -Richard Bach

I really like this! I totally know the feeling, and let me tell you it's always best to act on that. Great poem because it captures the emotion of indecision perfectly when you're divided between what you feel strongly is right and what the social norm is. Love it. If you get a chance, I'd love your feedback on some of my poetry. Here, I Can Barely Think is a personal favorite. 

on Dec. 2 2011 at 4:00 pm
Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And when I'm gone, just carry on, don't mourn
Rejoice every time you hear the sound of my voice
Just know that I'm looking down on you smiling
And I didn't feel a thing, So baby don't feel my pain
Just smile back"-Eminem

Yeah, that's probably the best thing about it.

on Dec. 2 2011 at 3:10 pm
Wonderment DIAMOND, Scranton, Pennsylvania
75 articles 0 photos 142 comments
I like the fact that it reads like a story almost. :)

on Nov. 28 2011 at 5:32 pm
Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And when I'm gone, just carry on, don't mourn
Rejoice every time you hear the sound of my voice
Just know that I'm looking down on you smiling
And I didn't feel a thing, So baby don't feel my pain
Just smile back"-Eminem

I know, that's what I didn't like about it.  I like  being "Indie" if you know what I mean, and this just isn't my style.

on Nov. 28 2011 at 5:20 pm
Donahue8 BRONZE, Lansdale, Pennsylvania
4 articles 1 photo 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The only easy day was Yesterday" -U.S. Navy SEALs

It's a little too steriotypical. It's good, just doesnt seem very original.

Tiggerlily14 said...
on Nov. 28 2011 at 12:57 pm
sorry....yeah, i know the feeling of needing to say something.....I was just "over-tired" and annoyed when i said that.... 

ikr, when you are hunting you have time to think about stuff.  I even did my mail box club while I was out there.   and just being out in the center of God's creation is awesome  :)

on Nov. 28 2011 at 12:45 pm
Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And when I'm gone, just carry on, don't mourn
Rejoice every time you hear the sound of my voice
Just know that I'm looking down on you smiling
And I didn't feel a thing, So baby don't feel my pain
Just smile back"-Eminem

Fine, be that way.  Go ahead, try to play it as me just wanting to talk to some girl, but I firmly believe that God told me to say something.  There are a lot of hurting people in this town, and pain was written all over this girls face.  By the way, the thing I like the most about hunting isn't the hunting, it's how close I get to God while I'm there.

Tiggerlily14 said...
on Nov. 25 2011 at 7:25 pm
snicker.....snicker....sorry I couldn't help myself....ok my comment in one word.....BOYS!!!!   sorry again.....




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