This piece has also been published in Teen Ink's monthly print magazine.Wonderful job!!!! you are a talented writer and keep up the good work! if u have time please check out my poem called "Sensitive Am I" and rate and leave a comment. Thanks and keep writing!
wow, great poem!!! i loved all the imagery! this really is amazing. keep on writing, please! :)
I agree with what feedback said. If u love this girl, add more about what makes her great. If it's just a plain old girl, then u need to add some other kind of meaning.
that was awesome imagery that a true poet would recognize!! love it!!
This was great, like a snapshot of one summer memory. I love dhow you took a simple task and broke it apart into a beautiful and fufilling work of art. Keep up the good work!
it doesnt have any feelings
if you are writing about somthing you love, then try to make people smile when they read it
if your are writing about somthing you hate then make people feel your anger or your pain when they read it
make their eyebrows burrow
make it so the reader cant help but have an expression
you as a writer i think you have talent but your poem could be a lot better
i now im not a professional but that just my advice and my honest opini... (more »)
this was really great, your a great writer
keep up the good work:)
this was a cool piece, it made me think of washing the car in summertime. nice.
I love how you take an ordinary task such as washing a car and give it such romance and appeal. This is really good!
i really like it. its simple and to the point. it makes me thing of arizona in the summer and being in the scorching heat and the water feels so good because its so hot. captures it perfectly. :)
Wonderful poem. It brings out the true, and curious child that is within all teens. Great work, It is a very refreshing poem.
I don't get it? What is the point? Yes, people like hidden meanings, but this secret message needs and answer key.
i dont think she is in love with the girl next door...it just seems like an expression of young happiness, i remember always loving washing cars when i was younger. Awesome poem!
Are you in love with the girl next door? I think you mean for this to sound deeper than it really is! i understand the concept! your way of exaggerating works! There's passion!
what are you talking about maybe i am not reading it well but i dont know what you are talking about. the reason i ask is because it sounds as if you have deeper meaning but i just cant figure it.
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