Extended Metaphor Poem on Basketball

March 5, 2008
By Zachary Kleemeyer, Chester Springs, PA

My Life is Basketball
My eyes are big before the game starts
My body covered in hope
18 years of practice
My mind is focussed
I have only one purpose
I visualize everything I want to do
My home the court
The crowd surrounding with their big eyes watching
Attracted to the bright lights
My team behind me
Weaving in and out of expectant fans
Making our way to the court
Endless cameras
Each other's families
Still sensing the sudden thrill of anticipation
We circle up, hands together, chanting
A team together
All focussed on glory
Where we will Live forever


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This is so true. Your great at writing. :)

igot_thefunk said...
on Mar. 4 2015 at 4:10 pm
BALL IS LIFE BROOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!

16490 said...
on Mar. 4 2014 at 9:23 pm
how is this poem a metaphor

on Jun. 9 2012 at 7:01 pm
TMarie42 SILVER, Orland, California
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Favorite Quote:
Pulvis et umbra sumus.

Someone who understands and loves basketball! Great poem.

vazenitran98 said...
on Mar. 13 2012 at 4:24 pm
vazenitran98, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"I had the blues because I had no shoes until upon the street,I met a man who had no feet."

This was a nice poem. I like how you described the whole thing.

on Oct. 9 2011 at 5:58 pm
hahaha your mother :l

on Aug. 6 2011 at 2:39 pm
Lola_Black GOLD, Harrison, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"I've always been famous. It's just everybody's just now finding out." --Lady Gaga

Not only did you pick an awesome sport to compare life to, but you did an awesome job at it! Bravo! (By the way, could you please read some of my writing?)

TAR11 SILVER said...
on Jul. 15 2011 at 8:37 am
TAR11 SILVER, Allison Park, Pennsylvania
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Hey I love basketball too.  Please check out my poems From the Hilltop and Anonymous' Inferno. 

Irockursocks said...
on May. 10 2011 at 5:21 pm
this totally reminds me of the time my NJB team won the national tournament!!  Awesome work :)

mike hhyrbyr said...
on May. 4 2011 at 9:09 am

i love basketball it is my life

 

 


on Mar. 31 2011 at 2:59 pm
blackrose326 GOLD, Burlington, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
If who I am is what I have and what I have is lost then who am I? Anonymous
Beauty can not be found in worldy views for these are; corrupted veiws straight form the gates of hell - Anonymous

I LOVEEEEEE ITTTTT!!!!!!!!!!!

Basketball is my life:) I can relate so well:) You really got the emotions that happen before the game perfect.


on Mar. 5 2011 at 10:27 am
Basketball23 SILVER, Pine Grove, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"I'm living in a shell with no soul" -Three Days Grace (World So Cold)
"Time still turns the pages of the book it's burned" -Avenged Sevenfold (So Far Away)

I love basketball so I can completely relate, but the title is just - not to be harsh - but boring.  Other than that, it's really good.

on Dec. 29 2010 at 12:57 pm
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"

It's a good poem, I like it. Just a suggestion, but a different title might make more people interested in reading it.

Lucy(: GOLD said...
on Aug. 19 2010 at 12:56 pm
Lucy(: GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
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i lovee basketballl also, so i have complete empathy for the way i feel when i play.

i like how you tie it into your life, not justt he game

its truly beautiful

but maybe change the title to something more eye catching ?


txdrama SILVER said...
on Jul. 28 2010 at 11:11 am
txdrama SILVER, Austin, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"The hardest choice in life is learning which bridge to burn, and which to cross."

I love basketball myself, this is a great poem to get me ready for a game

on Jun. 14 2010 at 11:35 am
thezebrasgray PLATINUM, Taylorsville, Utah
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I love basketball too, and i love the metaphors, its just that the amount of sylables in each line is totally different, making it so that it doesn't flow as nicely as it could.

on May. 23 2010 at 8:42 pm
andshesfearless GOLD, West Harrison, New York
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Favorite Quote:
when the power of love overcomes the love of power, the world will know peace.
-jimi hendrix-

haha dude i love this is really awesome lol

on May. 23 2010 at 3:33 pm
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD, Kansas City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
\"either write something worth reading or do something worth writing. -Benjamin Franklin

\"If columbus would have turned back, no one would have blamed him. No one would have remembered him either.\"

\"If music be the food of love, play on.\"

great job-this is awesome

on Jan. 27 2010 at 4:27 pm
awsome man, u must like kobe yeaaaa

Beastmode said...
on May. 31 2009 at 11:28 pm
Nice


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