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Extended Metaphor Poem on Basketball

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My Life is Basketball
My eyes are big before the game starts
My body covered in hope
18 years of practice
My mind is focussed
I have only one purpose
I visualize everything I want to do
My home the court
The crowd surrounding with their big eyes watching
Attracted to the bright lights
My team behind me
Weaving in and out of expectant fans
Making our way to the court
Endless cameras
Each other's families
Still sensing the sudden thrill of anticipation
We circle up, hands together, chanting
A team together
All focussed on glory
Where we will Live forever



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TMarie42 said...
Jun. 9, 2012 at 7:01 pm:
Someone who understands and loves basketball! Great poem.
 
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vazenitran98 said...
Mar. 13, 2012 at 4:24 pm:
This was a nice poem. I like how you described the whole thing.
 
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mothershouse@gmai said...
Oct. 9, 2011 at 5:58 pm:
hahaha your mother :l
 
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Lola_Black said...
Aug. 6, 2011 at 2:39 pm:
Not only did you pick an awesome sport to compare life to, but you did an awesome job at it! Bravo! (By the way, could you please read some of my writing?)
 
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TAR11 said...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 8:37 am:
Hey I love basketball too.  Please check out my poems From the Hilltop and Anonymous' Inferno. 
 
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Irockursocks said...
May 10, 2011 at 5:21 pm:
this totally reminds me of the time my NJB team won the national tournament!!  Awesome work :)
 
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mike hhyrbyr said...
May 4, 2011 at 9:09 am:

i love basketball it is my life

 

 

 
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Basketball23This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 5, 2011 at 10:27 am:
I love basketball so I can completely relate, but the title is just - not to be harsh - but boring.  Other than that, it's really good.
 
blackrose326 replied...
Mar. 31, 2011 at 2:59 pm :

I LOVEEEEEE ITTTTT!!!!!!!!!!!

Basketball is my life:) I can relate so well:) You really got the emotions that happen before the game perfect.

 
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SpringRayynThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 29, 2010 at 12:57 pm:
It's a good poem, I like it. Just a suggestion, but a different title might make more people interested in reading it.
 
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Lucy(: This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 19, 2010 at 12:56 pm:

i lovee basketballl also, so i have complete empathy for the way i feel when i play.

i like how you tie it into your life, not justt he game

its truly beautiful

but maybe change the title to something more eye catching ?

 
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txdrama said...
Jul. 28, 2010 at 11:11 am:
I love basketball myself, this is a great poem to get me ready for a game
 
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brax34 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 14, 2010 at 11:35 am:
I love basketball too, and i love the metaphors, its just that the amount of sylables in each line is totally different, making it so that it doesn't flow as nicely as it could.
 
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krazeecasey13 said...
May 23, 2010 at 8:42 pm:
haha dude i love this is really awesome lol
 
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Egyptiangirl13 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 23, 2010 at 3:33 pm:
great job-this is awesome
 
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kobeismvpnolebron said...
Jan. 27, 2010 at 4:27 pm:
awsome man, u must like kobe yeaaaa
 
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Beastmode said...
May 31, 2009 at 11:28 pm:
Nice
 
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chelsea246 said...
Apr. 14, 2009 at 6:37 am:
very exciting to read!
 
16490 replied...
Mar. 4 at 9:23 pm :
how is this poem a metaphor
 
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