August 12, 2011
Darkness comes,
Swiftly,silently, deadly.
It consumes me,
suffocates me,
Pulls me down.
Down where light can't reach me.

I feel the end drawing near,
Not even a breath away,
and I do not fight it.
I welcome it with arms wide open,
but it does not come.

I begin to shake,
but not from fear.
I realize it's only a dream,
a sweet, sweet dream,
too good to be true.
And then I wake up.

I see you there standing over me,
as tears fill my eyes,
and pour down like rain.
You pull me close,
and wrap your arms around me.
Whispering in my ear,
telling me everything will be ok,
that it was just a dream.
But I know it won't be okay,
Until that dream becomes reality....

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NightGoddess17 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 7, 2012 at 10:36 am
this is amazing! i wrote a poem just like this... weird... this is amazing!! keep up the good work!!!
Emiri said...
Nov. 27, 2011 at 6:18 am

Sothe dream was about you dying. You did a really great job setting the mood, flowy and almost darkly magical. it's so true for alot o people... going to sleep and just wishing they would never wake up. i olove it. :)


T. said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 8:39 am
Wow. This is a really amazing poem! Keep writing!
T. said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 8:38 am
Wow. This is a amazing poem! I loved it! Keep writing.
ByThisBlindingLight said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 8:20 am
aww, thats really sad. and impactful. Stay strong <3 that was really deep
Fayrouz This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 30, 2011 at 3:16 pm
very good imagery and emotions, but I feel that it is kind of generic. this isn't an insult and don't take it too harshly, but I think that you can experiment with poetic elements like alliteration and consanance to make it more creative and special. good luck in your writing!
TabbyCat16 said...
Oct. 19, 2011 at 9:31 pm
this is an amazing poem, it really gets me thinking :/
Melissabelle said...
Sept. 9, 2011 at 7:01 pm
Really good imagery! Really liked it.
backyardheart said...
Aug. 21, 2011 at 2:04 pm
Dark and lovely. I enjoyed it. said...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 7:05 pm
awesome poem! I really really like this a lot. great job!! = )
Bambi67 said...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 6:51 pm
nice!!!!!keep writing =)
Chibi_Danni replied...
Sept. 4, 2011 at 9:23 am

hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm, I LOVE Its!!!!!


silver47 replied...
Sept. 13, 2011 at 10:52 pm

wow thats really good makes you think of the bad dreams youve had


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