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The past is there and always will be,
dont think I will ever forget about you forgetting about me,
you think its fine and alright,
i guess you will never see it from my sight,
you think after you left me in the dark,
it would leave me no mark?
what you did was wrong,
maybe it should be in a song,
all I know is things will never be the same,
you probably think thats lame,
because you always want things your way,
but im sorry to say,
not today.





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NaleDawg said...
Aug. 7, 2011 at 4:08 pm
I like the word usage and rhyme, I really like the message as well. Keep it up
 
toriroxsoutloud replied...
Aug. 7, 2011 at 4:17 pm

thank you

:)

 
marissa87 said...
Aug. 3, 2011 at 8:09 am
Its really good. the second line i think is a little awkward. I think if you revised that it would be a little better. Dont try to hard to rhyme i think some poems are better with out ryhme so dont feel like ur poems have to rhyme.
 
FreedomIsMyVirtue said...
Aug. 2, 2011 at 5:53 pm
The lines maybe it should be in a song doesn't seem to fit in into this poem. I think you should revise it or reword it because it seems like you're trying hard to rhyme. Anyway, it's just me. :)

its fine should be it's fine
It's not a curse to used apostrophes so don't be afraid. :)
i should be in capital.

Other than that, I like this poem and I hate how people take advantage of me too :)))
 
toriroxsoutloud replied...
Aug. 3, 2011 at 11:12 am

thank you guys! I appriciate it (:

 

and Yes I feel like almost everyone does it to me.

 
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