My Stupid Feelings

Your eyes are like the dark pines on a Christmas tree.
Your hair is always perfect like a new penny.
Your hands are molded to fit mine perfectly like two puzzle pieces are formed to connect together.
When you hug me, I feel like a baby protected by Spiderman.
When you smile at me my heart turns into a butterfly with wing spasms.
When you left me, I felt like an elephant had stepped on my head.





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cynthia.allen16 said...
Jul. 21, 2011 at 7:04 pm
hi i liked your poem it was really great! :)
 
JustAnotherOwl said...
Jul. 20, 2011 at 6:35 pm
This was creative and really nice. I especially liked, "When you left me, I felt like an elephant stepped on my head." (I don't know if that was exactly the wording; the comment box is blocking that line.) This wasn't too serious, but I liked it.
 
Molly11 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 9:14 pm
I really liked that you compared their hair to something round (a penny) and their eyes to something sharp and straight (pine needles). That's pretty cool. Actually, I liked the whole thing (esp Spiderman haha) except the puzzle piece simile felt kind of cliche. Good work!
 
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