The Words That Slip Away

July 1, 2011
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Roses are red,
I'll always love you.
Look at this sham
We put ourselves through.

Violets are blue,
In colorblind views.
So is a heart
If you mix up hues.

Sugar is sweet.
How doubtful that is
If I'm a match
For a glucose wiz.

All of your words,
They end in cliché.
How do I know
If you'll really stay?





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gigi01 said...
Jul. 22, 2011 at 10:59 am
Very Nice! I also like how it starts with "Roses are Red," but the poem itself is far from conventional! It is touching too. Could you look at my poem "Fireflies and Stars?" It's similar to this one. 
 
.Izzy. said...
Jul. 22, 2011 at 10:09 am
I liked how you started the poem with "Roses are red". Also liked the part about the glucose wiz. I think I read this before, maybe in someone's favorites? Good job!
 
hanging_girl_666 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 21, 2011 at 10:32 pm
Amazing. 5 stars
 
TwasBrilling said...
Jul. 21, 2011 at 8:48 pm
I LOVE how you take a cliche, and put it down!!
 
bookworm29 said...
Jul. 21, 2011 at 6:04 pm
These are the words that come to my mind when reading this poem: Impudent, insolent, suspicious, fiery, wishful, hopeful, and slightly scared?
 
ohheyyyelli said...
Jul. 19, 2011 at 2:36 pm

You have a quirky style of writing, sort of edgy. I like it[:

I like "Sugar is sweet

How doubtful that is

If I'm a match

For a glucose wiz"

 
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