I hate you

June 11, 2011
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you made it clear
you left no doubt
now i want you gone
i want you out
of my heart and life
of my mind and dreams
of my expectations
out of everything

at first i thought id be OK
but i know that's just lies
I'm covering for my bOKen heart
and tearing in my eyes
I'm wishing that you'd go away
but i don't want you gone
there's now a void inside of me
that's wondering what went wrong

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JessHaley said...
Jul. 25, 2011 at 1:28 pm
*ex-bofriend DI (initials)
Silent_Artist said...
Jul. 3, 2011 at 5:06 pm
Be sure to capitalize I. Also, forgot the R in broken. Just things I noticed in my quick look-over. Other then that, good job.
.Izzy. replied...
Jul. 3, 2011 at 10:12 pm
Other than the couple grammatical errors already pointed out, this was really good. Keep writing!
sakina replied...
Jul. 4, 2011 at 10:43 am

Hi! Ur poem is great no doubt about that.. But wat i would say is Instead of

My heart and life

u could've written

My heart and mind

And then

My dreams and life..

Just suggesting...:) And the rest is great..

And i would want you to write a happy poem ...TRy it it'l make you feel better..Again just suggeting..


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