Destinies Entwined

June 11, 2011
By SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends


Twice entwined,
Eyes of black,
And hearts that shine.

Weak they are apart,
Combined they have the strength,
To withstand the greatest attempts to thwart.

A bond unbreakable,
Not of siblings,
But of distant blood unshakeable.

Thrice they shall be tested,
Once by man with heart of beast,
Once by a truest friend never bested,
And once by a tempest from the east.

In the end,
They must stand together,
Or to the will of enemies,
They shall bend.

Eyes that meet,
Hearts that touch,
Together never in retreat.

Date of birth the same,
Destinies entwined,
To win this frightful game.

The author's comments:
I wrote this poem with the thought of a prophecy in mind. It would work well as a beginning to a story or novel. The inspiration fror this poem came from my cousin Riley. We share the exact same birthday, and are distant cousins.

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on Sep. 12 2011 at 7:42 pm
BetweenWorks SILVER, Charlotte, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
The meaning of life is a question that you have already answered.

This sounds like a great book! Unless it is a more pbeat story i would suggest making it have a sad ending. I think it would make a great ending.

on Aug. 26 2011 at 8:08 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

Thanks!            

on Aug. 26 2011 at 8:06 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

Wow, this really sounds like an amazing prophecy!  You should really write a book based on it.  I would definitely read it!

 

In regards to the poem, it was excellent.  The rhythm was good and you kept the stanzas relatively consistent.  Excellent work!


on Aug. 6 2011 at 12:09 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

Thanks!              

on Aug. 5 2011 at 9:56 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~
~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~
~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than
a distant memory.~

Why haven't you written a book about this? It's like , the perfect introduction !

Keep it up , your an amazing poet!


on Aug. 5 2011 at 4:10 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

Thanks! Maybe I will! 

on Jul. 30 2011 at 6:57 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
6 articles 0 photos 379 comments

Favorite Quote:
"See, we don't really care who you are;
Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.
So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer's disease,
And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief."

"Sanctuary"- Paradise Fears

I have to say, I'm in agreement with Garnet! Write a book, short story, novella based on this, anything! This was very good :) It was interesting without being confusing!

on Jul. 22 2011 at 12:19 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

Thank you everyone for your awesome feedback!

on Jul. 21 2011 at 9:58 pm
TheHangingGirl BRONZE, Winter Haven, Florida
1 article 1 photo 250 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Poets utter great and wise things that they themselves can not comprehend."

My favorite one of yours.

on Jul. 13 2011 at 12:24 am
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
31 articles 6 photos 578 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything's a triangle." ~ My mother

"Write what you love, write what you care about, because sometimes, it's the easiest way to be heard."

Oh, please write a book based on this! It would be really cool! I think you could do a lot with it. It's amazing :)

on Jul. 6 2011 at 3:20 pm
writer_girl SILVER, Stuart, Virginia
7 articles 0 photos 9 comments
Incredible! You did a good job writing this.

on Jul. 6 2011 at 11:03 am
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

You should totally write this book :)

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on Jul. 6 2011 at 1:04 am
artgirl SILVER, Gaston, Oregon
6 articles 14 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It is our choices, Harry, that show what we truly are, far more then are abilities."

this is very cool :D


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