Destinies Entwined

June 11, 2011
Twice entwined,
Eyes of black,
And hearts that shine.

Weak they are apart,
Combined they have the strength,
To withstand the greatest attempts to thwart.

A bond unbreakable,
Not of siblings,
But of distant blood unshakeable.

Thrice they shall be tested,
Once by man with heart of beast,
Once by a truest friend never bested,
And once by a tempest from the east.

In the end,
They must stand together,
Or to the will of enemies,
They shall bend.

Eyes that meet,
Hearts that touch,
Together never in retreat.

Date of birth the same,
Destinies entwined,
To win this frightful game.

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MagicMan2011 said...
Sept. 12, 2011 at 7:42 pm
This sounds like a great book! Unless it is a more pbeat story i would suggest making it have a sad ending. I think it would make a great ending.
CarrieAnn13 said...
Aug. 26, 2011 at 8:06 pm

Wow, this really sounds like an amazing prophecy!  You should really write a book based on it.  I would definitely read it!


In regards to the poem, it was excellent.  The rhythm was good and you kept the stanzas relatively consistent.  Excellent work!

shadowrider replied...
Aug. 26, 2011 at 8:08 pm
Love.Hate.Passion. said...
Aug. 5, 2011 at 9:56 pm

Why haven't you written a book about this? It's like , the perfect introduction !

Keep it up , your an amazing poet!

shadowrider replied...
Aug. 6, 2011 at 12:09 pm
JustAnotherOwl said...
Jul. 30, 2011 at 6:57 pm
I have to say, I'm in agreement with Garnet! Write a book, short story, novella based on this, anything! This was very good :) It was interesting without being confusing!
shadowrider replied...
Aug. 5, 2011 at 4:10 pm
Thanks! Maybe I will! 
shadowrider said...
Jul. 22, 2011 at 12:19 pm
Thank you everyone for your awesome feedback!
hanging_girl_666 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 21, 2011 at 9:58 pm
My favorite one of yours.
Garnet77 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 12:24 am
Oh, please write a book based on this! It would be really cool! I think you could do a lot with it. It's amazing :)
writer_girl said...
Jul. 6, 2011 at 3:20 pm
Incredible! You did a good job writing this.
IamtheshyStargirl said...
Jul. 6, 2011 at 11:03 am
You should totally write this book :)
artgirl said...
Jul. 6, 2011 at 1:04 am
this is very cool :D
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