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Like a man, he looks at them—
The children so innocent,
Whose lives are like rare gems,
To whom the warnings are sent.

Jumping, running and playing,
They look happy and in peace,
Unaware of everything,
Things that were planned by the beast.

Close, he is getting closer,
Getting ready to do it—
Befriend them and take them there,
To a place where he could fit.

Some call it “the punishment,”
Others call it “the fireplace,”
And though in it is torment,
He calls it “home”—the dark place.

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Raytheraym said...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 12:52 am
Wow, this is really good! Very meaningful and great imagery. Very well written! :)
musicispassion said...
Jul. 3, 2011 at 1:59 am
i like this you do everything don't you reviews, poems, opinions and they're all different
Alon_Freevoice replied...
Jul. 3, 2011 at 2:55 am
I actually like it. I mean, doing a lot of things, or at least, trying to. I wrote a poem then essay, then short stories. I want to have part in every section of this site, I think. :) I may be bizzare with some but I'm trying to improve. :)

Anyway, thanks for your comments. And I'm glad you like it. =D
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 3, 2011 at 3:20 am
it's not a bad thing it's something to be proud of ur a well rounded teen inker does it matter if people are bizzare
Mystisha said...
Jun. 29, 2011 at 9:13 am

Nice one I really liked it...gr8 job..

I wished the poem was a bit more longer..i wanted to read it more...well i'll read some of your other works too..guess it'll nice too just like this one,,:)

CarrieAnn13 said...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 9:36 pm
This is a great poem with an excellent point of view!  Good job. :)
writerthinkerdreamer said...
Jun. 26, 2011 at 4:01 pm
Wow, I really like the point of view of this poem :)
JoPepper said...
Jun. 24, 2011 at 11:17 am
That was very good I really like it.  I got a story idea now!!! :D  Good job don't stop writing!!!!!
Alon_Freevoice replied...
Jun. 24, 2011 at 7:44 pm
A story, huh? Maybe, I'd like it to see it some time.. :D
Thanks for the comment, by the way..
JoPepper replied...
Jun. 25, 2011 at 11:05 am
Actually never mind it was stupid of me to say that.  You should write a story with that topic it would be really interesting.  Sorry. :/
Alon_Freevoice replied...
Jun. 25, 2011 at 6:14 pm
Stupid of you? You're sure? Well, of course not!

I'd read your articles, commented on them and rated them. They're all good which means you're a good writer. If you want to write, write. And I wouldn't mind if you got the idea from this poem or somewhere else. Btw, I'm not good in making stories. :)))
Alon_Freevoice replied...
Jun. 25, 2011 at 6:15 pm
I didn't actually read them all.. But I read enough to know that you are a good writer :))
JoPepper replied...
Jun. 26, 2011 at 11:53 am
Are you sure it feels like I'm stealing an idea. :/
Alon_Freevoice replied...
Jun. 27, 2011 at 4:08 am
You're not stealing an idea? Maybe, not. YOu know. It's my idea. But if you ask if you can use it, my answer is yes. Plus, mine is poem.. yours is i think it's ok :)
JoPepper replied...
Jun. 27, 2011 at 11:26 am
Thank you!!! :D
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