Soaring Free

March 27, 2011
By CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 220 comments

Oh, I’m a sucker, so fragile, so weak.
I need a lift to the mountain peak.
Wait, for awhile, realize I can’t climb that high.
I have no way to get there- That I cannot deny.

I’m no coward, no, I don’t feel pain.
There’s only one way out- and I pray in vain.
My simple life, to you, to your eyes.
If only you knew it’s this life I demise.

You see my disguise, you think, it’s real.
You see me smile- You don’t know how I feel.
Inside, I’m holding on, to pain and rage.
This person I am doesn’t want to engage.

I am a lonely soul, walking, without a clue.
I am- well, I truly don’t know who.
I am a girl, well mannered, polite.
I am a lady- however very uptight.

Sometimes, I throw fits, other times I throw stones.
Either way six feet under go the bones.
Fresh blood, rich meat, it makes worms go to work.
Eating flesh- tearing skin, those insects tend to lurk.

Forget, possibly forever, but the feelings don’t subside.
My brain holds memories- my mind can’t hide.
Memories, lingering, invading my thought.
They wish to stress and leave me distraught.

Adrenaline, rushing through my veins, surging.
There’s no defense from my body’s urging.
I cannot do anything, nothing, but surrender.
Seems to me that I am my own contender.

There is a fight, a battle, going on every day.
A war within my head- a war I cannot sway.
I sink, fall further, through a never ending hole.
Some think they gave me knowledge- but that’s really all they stole.

Within the lies, were lies they sold, lies I happened to believe,
Isn’t it odd how pain seems never to relieve.
Wincing, eyes closed, a final wish for a miracle,
It’ll come true I know it will- now that was satirical.

Amateurs, all around, trying to detain,
Take me to the mountain peak- where there is no restrain.
Where all of the strange, absurd, and the wild,
Tend to take my breath and leave me beguiled.

Soaring through the air, a bird, it hovers,
Gliding over the city- discovering it’s wonders.
Overlooking the ugly, this bird, it sings,
Nothing could hold it down- not even broken wings.

So I ask, why let others push, why let others shove,
I can be as free- as happy as this dove.
I will not be stunted, no, I will not ignore the omen,
Instead I shall pursue my dreams and say what I had left unspoken.



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CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Jul. 28 2011 at 1:41 pm
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
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thankyou!!! I'm happy you enjoyed =]

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Jul. 28 2011 at 1:40 pm
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 220 comments
Thanks and once you start ryhming you can't really break it or it looks and sounds weird, but thankyou :)

Vicky11 SILVER said...
on Jul. 27 2011 at 11:55 am
Vicky11 SILVER, Charlottenlund, Other
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Favorite Quote:
The wisest men follow their own direction - Euripides

A great poem, I mean it. It kept my attention all the way through, and I loved the rhymes :) Keep on writing!

on Jul. 27 2011 at 9:19 am
TwasBrilling BRONZE, Staunton, Va, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The owl of Minerva spreads its wings only with the falling of the dusk" -H.W. Hegel

"Words are our most inexhaustable source of magic' -Albus Dumbledore

This is is good! Sometimes the rhymes do seem forced, but not so much that it takes away from the meaning of the poem.

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Jun. 22 2011 at 6:55 pm
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 220 comments
Thankyou!!! Sum's up what I've been through in life. :)

on Jun. 22 2011 at 1:57 am
hxcRocker DIAMOND, Haiku, Hawaii
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This poem, to me, is a sum of life's challenges and how in the end you have found a way to overcome them. I love poems like this.

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Jun. 21 2011 at 10:52 am
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 220 comments
Haha thanks :)

on Jun. 21 2011 at 8:24 am
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"See, we don't really care who you are;
Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.
So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer's disease,
And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief."

"Sanctuary"- Paradise Fears

I like it! (: I feel like sometimes the rhymes are a little forced, but that's not really anything you really need to worry about. Anyway, it was very interesting! You have a good way of keeping attention! (:

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Jun. 20 2011 at 10:06 pm
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 220 comments
You are absolutely welcome thanks so much for taking the time to view this piece <3 haha and yes I love to rhyme.. :D

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Jun. 20 2011 at 10:01 pm
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 220 comments
Thankkyahhh <3 :) hehe I'm so happy!

on Jun. 20 2011 at 12:52 pm
WishfulDoer GOLD, Portland, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
If ignorance is bliss, why is our country so complicated?

This is amazing. I am extremely jealous of how you're capable of rhyming just about anything, but that doesn't lessen my respect for the overall outstanding quality and genius of the poem. Thank you for writing it. (:

on Jun. 20 2011 at 12:04 pm
ThisGirlWillMakeMistakes PLATINUM, Raymore, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry because it's over,
Smile because it happened."


-Dr. Suess

Wow this is abo-frikkin-loutley amazing!! i love how it rhymes and how it flows. i wish i could write as good as that. it really speaks to me and i overall LOVE IT <3

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Jun. 14 2011 at 11:08 pm
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 220 comments
I love to make people think, it's one of my jobs as a writer :) hehe

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Jun. 14 2011 at 11:07 pm
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 220 comments
I appreciate it thankyou :)

msp49 BRONZE said...
on Jun. 14 2011 at 2:02 pm
msp49 BRONZE, Middletown, Connecticut
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This was very good!  Your rhymes fit perfectly; the words were more complicated, yet they weren't forced at the end of the line to ryhme with another word.  It was a little difficult to understand a few parts, but I like pieces like that.  They make you think.  Great job!

on Jun. 13 2011 at 10:32 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

Nice! A bit confusing. But good. I understood it in the end. Great job! The flow and rhyming scheme is wonderful!

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Jun. 13 2011 at 9:53 pm
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 220 comments
:) thankyouuuu

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Jun. 13 2011 at 9:52 pm
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 220 comments
thankyouu!!

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Jun. 13 2011 at 9:52 pm
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 220 comments
Wow thanks guys I really appreciate you all taking the time to read my work and comment and sure I'd love to take a look :)

APL123 BRONZE said...
on Jun. 7 2011 at 6:59 pm
APL123 BRONZE, ..., New Jersey
1 article 1 photo 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened" - Dr. Seuss

i like the rhymes. 

the line "adrenaline, rushing through my veins" is kinda overused... i think just another word for rushing would make it not as trite... 

i like your use of the words satirical and beguiled





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