Happiness in the Night

May 19, 2011
By Velenas BRONZE, Lawrence, Kansas
Velenas BRONZE, Lawrence, Kansas
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I'll kiss you goodnight,
Just listen to my heartbeat,
Bad dreams I will fight.

We'll watch the sky lose light,
Sharing warmth under the sheet,
I'll kiss you goodnight.

I'll keep you safe throughout the night,
Electric feel where bodies meet,
Bad dreams I will fight.

Blankets keeping us from winter's bite,
Warm hands and cold feet,
I'll kiss you goodnight.

What a beautiful sight,
Beating hearts and shared heat,
Bad dreams I will fight.

We'll stay until the day turns bright,
All the odds will have been beat,
I'll kiss you goodnight,
Bad dreams I will fight.


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on Jun. 3 2011 at 3:17 pm
collegegirladventures GOLD, Mequon, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
A poet's work is to name the unnameable, to point at frauds, to take sides, start arguments, shape the world, and stop it going to sleep.

~Salman Rushdie

great job man!

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on Jun. 2 2011 at 6:57 pm
Ann314 SILVER, Santa Cruz, California
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Favorite Quote:
\\\"the truth is everyone is going to hurt you,you just gotta find the ones worth suffering for\\\"-Bob Marley

good job(:

on Jun. 1 2011 at 1:18 pm
thezebrasgray PLATINUM, Taylorsville, Utah
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Really, this is a very good poem, but the rhyming does seem to be a little bit stretched and forced, making the last parts of the lines not quite as well as they could otherwise, but still a great poem!

on May. 31 2011 at 10:49 am
Rinilove32 SILVER, Boise, Idaho
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this poem is sweet(:

i really like the way you used your repeatition but not in the same way each time(:


on May. 30 2011 at 4:00 pm
CatchAFallingStar PLATINUM, Pearland, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If you love something, let it go. If it comes back to you, it's yours, if it doesn't, it never was." - Unknown

I liked this poem alot :) You're pretty good. Keep writing.

on May. 29 2011 at 12:44 pm
nickykens ELITE, Draper, Utah
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It was a really good idea for a poem, but it seemed to me as redundant and simple.  The repeats of the lines seemed to have no particular meaning or rhythm... but definately keep writing.

on May. 29 2011 at 11:33 am
ShontelleSymone GOLD, New Castle, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"Are you chasing your dreams? Or are your dreams chasing you?" - Michelle Phan

This was really good. It's refreshing to see a male poet for a change. Keep it up.


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