Barnacles

April 3, 2011
By rojizo BRONZE, Chalfont, Pennsylvania
rojizo BRONZE, Chalfont, Pennsylvania
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Barnacles hold fast to the ship’s hull
Hissing, wet winds above, roaring waves below
The merciless waters gargle and roll
Buoys warn with their constant toll

Hissing, wet winds above, roaring waves below
Ever more quickly approaching the shoal
Buoys warn with their constant toll
Captain struggles and heaves, but loses control

Ever more quickly approaching the shoal
A violent crash, crunch, and jerk, the dark ocean calls
Captain struggles and heaves, but loses control
He fights no longer and gives to the fall

A violent crash, crunch, and jerk, the dark ocean calls
The merciless waters gargle and roll
He fights no longer and gives to the fall
Barnacles hold fast to the ship’s hull

The author's comments:
This first pantoum (pantun) of mine I wrote for Creative Writing class. I love this style; the repetition can make you feel like you're running through some sort of poetical Koch curve or an M.C. Escher drawing. Though you must use the same lines more than once, they mustn't necessarily have the same meaning, and that is wherein the pantoum's creative challenge lies. For some reason all my lines ended up (slant)rhyming, too.

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