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You stole my heart,
and won't let go.
It's a start,
but I can't let it show.

These words I write,
are not for me.
They're to do what's right,
and let you see.

I wish you'd read,
this poem and know.
You have my heart and won't let go.




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SwallowedByInsanity This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 10, 2011 at 12:21 pm:
I very much liked how they were all tied together with a rhyme scheme, which is surprising since I'm a big fan of free verse. Ending it with the title as your last line really made the whole thing fall into place.
 
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Im--NOT--RayynThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 22, 2011 at 4:46 pm:
Usually I don't really like rhyming poems, but I like the way you use rhythm (in all your poems) to keep a person reading.
 
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musicispassion said...
Aug. 12, 2011 at 11:23 pm:
i like both long and short poems but i write short poems so i like to see short poems this poem was great i like the last stanza it's cute short and to the point great work:P
 
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Love.Hate.Passion. said...
Aug. 7, 2011 at 9:11 pm:
The poem is cute and short. The rhyming was okay , and I liked your concept. My only criticism would be that I wish you would have expanded it.
 
blitsnik replied...
Aug. 7, 2011 at 9:34 pm :
 Thanks! and yeah, i wrote this at like 3 AM originally, and when i tried to expand it after the fact, the main flow and concept was gone. Thank you though! :)
 
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Emily.L said...
Aug. 2, 2011 at 11:54 am:
Aww, that was really cute! I liked it, and the rhyming wasn't overdone :)
 
blitsnik replied...
Aug. 2, 2011 at 4:18 pm :

Thank you :)

 

 
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Robyn97 said...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 9:21 am:
The poem was short, but really well done.
 
blitsnik replied...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 10:33 am :

thank you.

 

 
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Hazel-daisy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 26, 2011 at 11:51 am:
i really like it and i love the rhyming. i think the last verse is good! good job! :)
 
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blitsnik said...
Mar. 12, 2011 at 8:43 pm:
thanks. it was kinda a spur of the moment thing. but thank you for taking the time to comment. :)
 
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pianolover said...
Mar. 10, 2011 at 4:23 pm:
I love this poem so much! I think it is like an innocent attraction and it is really sweet!
 
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