A Ringing Bell

By blitsnik, Palm Bay, FL

There's something wrong,
that i cannot see.
Its gone on so long,
what could it be.

Like swimming in the sea,
with no shore in sight.
Yet sometimes i see,
a bold new light.

In the dead of the night,
when all should sleep.
My mind will fight,
and thoughts will leap.

My life is like,
a living hell.
Yet sometimes like,
a ringing bell.

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RobinGoodfellow said...
Sept. 7, 2012 at 9:54 pm:

Nice job blitsnik. good poem, good rythm. Its Oleg btw.

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Im--NOT--Rayyn said...
Nov. 22, 2011 at 4:39 pm:

This one is a little confusing to me. I don't get the bell analogy at all. But I do like the rhythm you used.

blitsnik replied...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 7:35 am :

Thanks. The bell analogy is supposed to represent how pure life can be compared to times of hardship. Thanks for reading! :)

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musicispassion said...
Aug. 12, 2011 at 11:22 pm:

u have a good rhythm to ur poems and i can't do that u have great imagery also sorry to hear but it made a beautiful poem

blitsnik replied...
Aug. 13, 2011 at 7:51 am :

Yeah, and thank you.

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Love.Hate.Passion. said...
Aug. 7, 2011 at 11:34 pm:

I like the poem , it rhymes nicely. I didn't think the last line summed it up right , it just made no sense. You have great imagery incorporated into it , and you had a great idea that turned into a good poem. Keep it up!

blitsnik replied...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 12:45 pm :

I used the last line, because when i picture a bell ringing, it isnt a big church bell, but one of the small silver ones. One where you ring it, and the note that comes out is so pure and happy. I thought i t would be a good opposite of peoples mental view of a living hell. Thank you though. :)

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thetruthawaits94 said...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 1:29 pm:

This is very good! I like the imagery. My favorite is actually the second stanza. i can really imagine myself lost swimming in the ocean until a light house turns on all of a sudden and i know which way to go. I like the meaning of this poem! Great job! :)

blitsnik replied...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 1:47 pm :

thanks, it means a lot

thetruthawaits94 replied...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 1:50 pm :

Sure thing! Thanks for entering into the contest! Of course, I will let you know if you've won by August 7th!

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Robyn97 said...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 9:20 am:

Nice rhyming. Great job!

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TwasBrilling said...
Jul. 26, 2011 at 9:49 am:

I really like this...especially the last 2 lines. I really like that metaphor.

blitsnik replied...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 1:06 am :

Thanks. When i made this poem, i actually made the last stanza first, then built it to that.

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pianolover said...
Mar. 30, 2011 at 10:43 pm:

I really like the third stanza. It was very graphic.