My Prison

February 5, 2011
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I’ve built myself a prison,
To house my greatest fears.
I’ve stayed away from it,
Haven’t seen it in many years.

To face my biggest fears,
I sought the prison out.
But when I finally found it,
I forgot what it was about.

This prison that I built
I placed myself inside
and all I’ve ended up doing,
Is making a place to hide

I’m hiding from the world,
not trusting anyone.
Hidden for so long,
Not even seeing the sun.

I’m tired of the pain,
and don’t want to go on.
I just want a little peace,
and for people to be gone.

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Im--NOT--Rayyn said...
Nov. 22, 2011 at 4:33 pm's strange how you made the prison change in the middle. It's really powerful the way that you wrote it. I'm sorry, I can't think of any critiquing right now.
musicispassion said...
Aug. 12, 2011 at 11:20 pm
ur a talented writer u haVe a way with words i enjpy ur work this is a great poem i imagined it all in my head keep writing
Love.Hate.Passion. said...
Aug. 7, 2011 at 11:36 pm


Good rhyme scheme.




= Amazing poem :)

blitsnik replied...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 12:43 pm
Lol, Thank you. :D
MyLifeInRuins said...
Aug. 6, 2011 at 7:37 pm
Would you say your prison is He.ll?
blitsnik replied...
Aug. 7, 2011 at 6:49 am
Not really He.ll, because mainly when i wrote this, and still now, i am a firm believer in God. I was just hiding from everyone, including myself. and being inside it, all i could see was the bad stuff of me, so that it continually got me farthre down, and not wanting to leave.
Jesusfreak78 said...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 4:38 pm
I can tottally relate very good, I litterally can't say anything bad about this poem and I'm a tough cirtic lol
Robyn97 said...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 9:13 am
This could describe some people I know...(those people may or may not include myself). Very good.
blitsnik replied...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 10:34 am
lol, and thanks.
TwasBrilling said...
Jul. 26, 2011 at 9:48 am
I agree! this relates to many people, and is very well written! Also, congrats on getting it to rhyme without sounding too forced!
blitsnik replied...
Jul. 26, 2011 at 9:50 am

Thank you!


pianolover said...
Mar. 30, 2011 at 10:45 pm
I loved this poem so much for two reasons. I can really relate to it (it says things that I feel but can't always express). Also, it was very well written.
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