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My Prison

February 5, 2011
By blitsnik SILVER, Palm Bay, Florida
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blitsnik SILVER, Palm Bay, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"If you must mount the gallows, give a coin to the headman, a jest to the crowd, and meet the drop with a smile on your lips."

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I’ve built myself a prison,
To house my greatest fears.
I’ve stayed away from it,
Haven’t seen it in many years.

To face my biggest fears,
I sought the prison out.
But when I finally found it,
I forgot what it was about.

This prison that I built
I placed myself inside
and all I’ve ended up doing,
Is making a place to hide

I’m hiding from the world,
not trusting anyone.
Hidden for so long,
Not even seeing the sun.

I’m tired of the pain,
and don’t want to go on.
I just want a little peace,
and for people to be gone.

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SpringRayyn PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 22 2011 at 4:33 pm
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"

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Wow...it's strange how you made the prison change in the middle. It's really powerful the way that you wrote it. I'm sorry, I can't think of any critiquing right now.
musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 12 2011 at 11:20 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
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Favorite Quote:
" Life is never easy for those who dream."
There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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ur a talented writer u haVe a way with words i enjpy ur work this is a great poem i imagined it all in my head keep writing
blitsnik SILVER said...
on Aug. 8 2011 at 12:43 pm
blitsnik SILVER, Palm Bay, Florida
8 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you must mount the gallows, give a coin to the headman, a jest to the crowd, and meet the drop with a smile on your lips."

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Lol, Thank you. :D
Love.Hate.Passion. said...
on Aug. 7 2011 at 11:36 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~
~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~
~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than
a distant memory.~

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Relatable.

Good rhyme scheme.

Emotional.

Deep.

Beautiful.

= Amazing poem :)

blitsnik SILVER said...
on Aug. 7 2011 at 6:49 am
blitsnik SILVER, Palm Bay, Florida
8 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you must mount the gallows, give a coin to the headman, a jest to the crowd, and meet the drop with a smile on your lips."

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Not really He.ll, because mainly when i wrote this, and still now, i am a firm believer in God. I was just hiding from everyone, including myself. and being inside it, all i could see was the bad stuff of me, so that it continually got me farthre down, and not wanting to leave.
MyLifeInRuins said...
on Aug. 6 2011 at 7:37 pm
Would you say your prison is He.ll?
Shadow878 GOLD said...
on Jul. 29 2011 at 4:38 pm
Shadow878 GOLD, Marion, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"I tell you the truth, unless you change and become like little children, you will never enter the kingdom of heaven." Matthew 18:3

"Do not pray for easy lives, pray to be stronger men." JFK

“Science without religion is lame, religion without science is blind.”Albert Einstein

"I believe in Christianity as I believe that the sun has risen: not only because I see it, but because by it I see everything else."
C. S. Lewis

"A young man who wishes to remain a sound atheist cannot be too careful of his reading."
C. S. Lewis

"Anyone who doesn’t believe in miracles is not a realist."
David Ben-Gurion

"An eye for an eye makes the world go blind" Gandi

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I can tottally relate very good, I litterally can't say anything bad about this poem and I'm a tough cirtic lol
blitsnik SILVER said...
on Jul. 29 2011 at 10:34 am
blitsnik SILVER, Palm Bay, Florida
8 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you must mount the gallows, give a coin to the headman, a jest to the crowd, and meet the drop with a smile on your lips."

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lol, and thanks.
Kai17 GOLD said...
on Jul. 29 2011 at 9:13 am
Kai17 GOLD, Spokane, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
*beepbeep*
"Where to, Miss?"
"To the stars."

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This could describe some people I know...(those people may or may not include myself). Very good.
blitsnik SILVER said...
on Jul. 26 2011 at 9:50 am
blitsnik SILVER, Palm Bay, Florida
8 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you must mount the gallows, give a coin to the headman, a jest to the crowd, and meet the drop with a smile on your lips."

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Thank you!

 

TwasBrilling BRONZE said...
on Jul. 26 2011 at 9:48 am
TwasBrilling BRONZE, Staunton, Va, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The owl of Minerva spreads its wings only with the falling of the dusk" -H.W. Hegel

"Words are our most inexhaustable source of magic' -Albus Dumbledore

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I agree! this relates to many people, and is very well written! Also, congrats on getting it to rhyme without sounding too forced!
pianolover said...
on Mar. 30 2011 at 10:45 pm
I loved this poem so much for two reasons. I can really relate to it (it says things that I feel but can't always express). Also, it was very well written.