Cold Hearted

December 7, 2010
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I sit in front of the warm, sizzling fire
For him to be back is all I desire
Stiff and cold he is now dead
And now he lays in his forever bed.

Even though his heart was cold
To women it was easily sold
I bought the bitter man’s soul
While the cancer took its toll.

Now that his time is up
I realize that our short-lived fairytale wasn’t enough
My heart still aches for his love
While he rests far above.

As the shadows dance across the wall
The memories flood down the hall
Tears stream from my eyes
And from my mouth escapes a cry.

The pain is too much to bear
For it gives myself quite a scare
I hug my knees close to my chest
And try to get some rest.

But I can’t because I miss him too much
I want to be within his clutch
I know my love is gone forever
But one day in heaven we will eventually be together.

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RarelyJaded This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 21, 2013 at 8:15 pm
The rhythm could have been faster, but that's just my preference. Overall it was really good, and I liked your message! XD
Basketball23 replied...
Mar. 22, 2013 at 10:01 am
Thank you!  I wrote it a few years ago, but I'll take your advice into account for future writings!
LoudDreamer said...
Jan. 24, 2012 at 6:53 am
The leanth of lines was kinda awkward, i think. It mad it flow a little weirdly. But I like it. I like how it is about a wife grieving for her husband, or at least a person grieving for the loss of their other. It is very good with imagry and it is very good at drawing the reader in to share the speaker's grief for a moment or two. Great work!
Basketball23 replied...
Jan. 24, 2012 at 3:11 pm
Thank you for being honest! I know what you meant by the lengths and now that I'm aware of that, I'll keep that in mind while I'm writing, so thank you! I'm also glad that you like it, it really means a lot to me :)
CWells_521 said...
Oct. 27, 2011 at 11:10 am
I really love this!
Basketball23 replied...
Oct. 29, 2011 at 10:00 am
Thank you!!!  It really means a lot to me :D
sherberteater said...
Sept. 7, 2011 at 3:31 pm
hey, I love the pic you put w/ the poem. lol I think this poem is really good.
Basketball23 replied...
Sept. 7, 2011 at 3:47 pm
Thanks so much!!!  It REALLY means a lot to me :D
sherberteater replied...
Sept. 7, 2011 at 6:50 pm
your welcome. you have talent
Basketball23 replied...
Sept. 7, 2011 at 8:21 pm
Well thank you soooo much!!!  It means the world to me when people think that!  I mean, my friends tell me I'm a good author, but they could just be saying that to be nice.  You don't really have to worry about my feelings.  So thank you!
sherberteater replied...
Sept. 7, 2011 at 8:43 pm

Well, I think I do have to worry about you feelings because Even though I do not know you in person, it would still kill me to know I hurt your feelings. It is just the way I am.


Basketball23 replied...
Sept. 8, 2011 at 12:20 pm
Well thank you for caring about my feelings!  I kind've feel like I know you even though I really don't, but I'd still rather you be 100% honest than nice.  But thank you, for everything!
sherberteater replied...
Sept. 10, 2011 at 4:11 pm
yah, I feel like I know you as well. your welcome.
casielynnxoxo said...
Aug. 11, 2011 at 10:41 pm
This one is my favorite, it's really descriptive, and it flows nice. Don't stop writing.
Basketball23 replied...
Aug. 13, 2011 at 6:56 am
Thank you soooooo much!!!  It really means a lot to me and I can't thank you enough!!!
casielynnxoxo replied...
Aug. 16, 2011 at 7:12 pm
Sure thing, I'm just being honest, lol.
Basketball23 replied...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 9:17 am
Well thank you thank you thank you THANK YOU!!!!
MacSchiff said...
Jun. 26, 2011 at 11:16 pm
Great poem!  You have a true talent!
Basketball23 replied...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 11:05 am
You really think so?  And thanks!  I really appreciate you commenting on all of my work :D
radio_song said...
Apr. 1, 2011 at 8:48 pm
aww, oh my Gosh... this is truly amazing.. its so heartfelt n, like just, wow. its very beautiful
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