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When im with you i feel special
And better than all of the rest,
Even at my very worst or best
Every time we talk my heart skips a beat
Is it just me or can you feel the heat
Rushing up to my face
I turn away in disgrace
But you turn me back around
To hear the soothing sound
Of your voice in my ear
Telling me my problems will disappear
Our eyes meet and we both know
Soon the things around us will slow
Until time stops and our lips meet
Then my life will be perfectly complete





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ShyGirl said...
Dec. 12, 2010 at 1:42 pm
Thanks for the feedback! I really appreciate it! I have more work on my page if you are interested! :) ThankS again!
 
BillyxInx4CxNeverxSawxItxComing said...
Dec. 6, 2010 at 12:18 pm
Wow this reakky great work it reminds  me of my boyfriend for some reason :p so that probably means it can spark up memories for others. Keep up the good work!
 
hnw415 said...
Dec. 6, 2010 at 12:05 pm
I love the rhyme scheme. It makes it easier to read, and it gives your poem a content mood. It is beautiful, but to make it more interesting maybe you should add rhetorical devices. Such as similes or metaphors. "He is as sweet as candy" is a simile, and "He is my light" is a metaphor.
 
Keirsten K. said...
Dec. 6, 2010 at 11:47 am
i think that this is an amazing poem. it makes me feel like i can relate to it because i have a special person in my life and feel the same way. 
 
sarah.hillier. said...
Dec. 6, 2010 at 11:09 am
I feel like this with my boyfriend. I have been with my man for a year and 2 months. This is my longest  relationship i have been in. I feel like he is the one. We have gone through everything together, and i mean everything. We fight all time, but we love it. I can say even though we hate each other sometimes we are always going to love each other.
 
guardian_angel said...
Dec. 6, 2010 at 9:13 am
I like the rhyme scheme in this poem. It gives the poem a nice flow, and makes me want to read it. I think you should try putting a little figurative language in the poem like metaphors or similes. 
 
Sanderson92 said...
Dec. 6, 2010 at 8:38 am
This is good. 
 
lostnhim said...
Dec. 5, 2010 at 7:05 pm
This is great! Keep up the good work! (: Would you take a look at some of mine? I would really appreciate your opinion.
 
dolphin13 said...
Dec. 5, 2010 at 11:28 am
Wow this is really good. I love it. Keep up the good work.
 
OriginalCarbonation said...
Dec. 5, 2010 at 10:42 am

very relatable. however i was a little confused by the jump between in the halls where it almost seems like she doesnt know him super well till when hes whispering in her ear, and then a kiss?! ah! hahaha so i guess i couldnt tell which part(s) if any were her dreams or reality.

but like i said, very relatable. i like it! :)

 
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