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Pieces of Peace

August 10, 2010
By syed954 BRONZE, Coral Springs, Florida
syed954 BRONZE, Coral Springs, Florida
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The blue prints for dreaming up the impossible are folded and hidden in my mind
Barricaded by a million peace treaties left unsigned
Trapped by a cage made of corpses of a world gone blind.

These latent thoughts speak to me at night
Those blue prints unravel in my dreams and come alive
Shining bright, white lights into the black night sky
I begin to believe peace has at last arrived.

At the stroke of seven, my alarm clock goes off
The disconcerting noise of a farmhouse terminates my wishful thoughts
Forcing me to flee a world, one I have always sought.



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on Sep. 6 2010 at 10:45 am
hazle1eyes SILVER, Greenfield, New Hampshire
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one look in the mirror can change how you see things and how you live your life

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on Sep. 6 2010 at 10:44 am
hazle1eyes SILVER, Greenfield, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
one look in the mirror can change how you see things and how you live your life

you know i really reall love it it's beautifull. where do you get your ideas i wonder great job you are really creative and i think thats cool

 


BigDreamer said...
on Sep. 6 2010 at 10:37 am
Oh how we all have those dreams. Lets pray one day our dreams of peace become our reality. 

Kristyx93 said...
on Sep. 6 2010 at 9:31 am
oh my goodness! This is such an amazing poem. It really captures the hopelessness of modern society.

JacknJill said...
on Sep. 6 2010 at 12:45 am
I thought this was fantastic! Its sorta depressing, but I liked it!!

shaon said...
on Sep. 5 2010 at 9:49 pm
this is just simply awsome

MonaWright said...
on Sep. 5 2010 at 9:39 pm

The poem carries an extremely powerful and unique voice; a difficult task to say the least, especially for young poets.

I also must applaud you on your diction. Your strategic word choice heavily contributed to the overall force in which the poem is delivered.

Please continue to write. The world needs more poets.  


JikkyT said...
on Sep. 5 2010 at 9:32 pm
What a powerful poem. It is easy to see that there is so much passion and truth  behind these words. Not only did the message get across, but your use of syntax, diction and imagery are outstanding to say the least. I enjoyed this poem very much.

Blake said...
on Sep. 5 2010 at 8:45 pm
Dude, I can relate to this poem 100%. I can't believe you only got one poem up here. Start making some more cuz you deff got what it takes.

TJislooking said...
on Sep. 5 2010 at 7:34 pm
This entire poem is extremely well written. The one line that really stands out is the last one in the first stanza. It's such a powerful rebuke of society.  

sweetlibra16 said...
on Sep. 5 2010 at 4:22 pm
What a beautiful poem!!! I really liked all the rich description in the poem. It really painted a picture in my mind. 

Alex34 said...
on Sep. 5 2010 at 1:11 pm
Absolutely incredible. I especially like the reference to Orwell in the last stanza--wish I thought of it. 

Jonathan0180 said...
on Sep. 5 2010 at 8:18 am
Extremely impressive poem you got going here.