Crimson Waves

July 2, 2010
By EmmaNemma GOLD, The Shire, Vermont
EmmaNemma GOLD, The Shire, Vermont
10 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you think you are a hypochondriac by definition aren't you?


Light was thrown off the waves, cast down by the moon
Though the light was bright, the shadow of the fort ahead laid heavily on our hearts
The colours of the flag we fought for fluttered, white stars on blue next to our brown skin and blue uniforms
The sand beneath our feet moved as we started forward, a machine with one purpose
The blasts of the cannons were quieter only then the yells of men as I watched my comrades die
Then I brought up my gun and we fired, only to have the front line fall
I fought my way up the hill, my friends and brothers my only protection from death
All around me were the slain and as I turned a new man fell on me
Blood coated his pale face and more spilled out of three wounds in his side
With a yell I forced him off me and charged, my heart thudded in my ears, in time with the pounding ocean waves
The sun rose slowly over the flying stars and bars, reflected in the glassy orbs I once used to see
Crimson waves still washed upon a blood soaked shore, having taken on the duty of my heart


The author's comments:
This was inspired by the story Glory about the 54th Massachusetts during the Civil war.

Similar Articles

JOIN THE DISCUSSION

This article has 6 comments.


EmmaNemma GOLD said...
on Aug. 3 2010 at 12:17 pm
EmmaNemma GOLD, The Shire, Vermont
10 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you think you are a hypochondriac by definition aren't you?

Yeah, I don't like describing all the violence so I put in metephores instead.

on Aug. 3 2010 at 10:21 am
Pitiful_Anonymous PLATINUM, New Cumberland, West Virginia
22 articles 0 photos 75 comments

Favorite Quote:
"and all you f***ers go beep beep beep in cheap,plastic cars. If It's to dumb to see or say you'll still sing it, and I'll just cue the applause" - Marilyn Manson

Well written and not to gory! :) A lot of people when handling these kind of subjects go way overboard wiht violence and gore, but you did it just fine! keeep writingg :)

EmmaNemma GOLD said...
on Aug. 3 2010 at 8:17 am
EmmaNemma GOLD, The Shire, Vermont
10 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you think you are a hypochondriac by definition aren't you?

Thanks! I like to understand the minds of the people in the civil war instead of just memorizing dates.

on Aug. 2 2010 at 7:31 pm
Just.A.Dream SILVER, Lake Geneva, Wisconsin
7 articles 0 photos 431 comments

Favorite Quote:
Part of the J7X team. :)

I like where the inspiration came from! :) Very well written, good job!

EmmaNemma GOLD said...
on Jul. 31 2010 at 2:18 pm
EmmaNemma GOLD, The Shire, Vermont
10 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you think you are a hypochondriac by definition aren't you?

Probably, I've never been able to get then and than right.

on Jul. 31 2010 at 1:27 pm
NeverCaredForKool-Aid GOLD, Elkridge, Maryland
13 articles 0 photos 531 comments

Favorite Quote:
I don't believe in hell but I believe in my parent's couch-- Watsky

This was a beautiful piece, I loved the last line esspecially.  It was very powerful.  The one question I have is when you say "The blasts of the cannons were quieter only then the yells of the men as I watched my comrades die" did you mean to have it be "only than the"?


Parkland Book