Mourning

June 11, 2010
By Inherinerd GOLD, Ashland, Ohio
Inherinerd GOLD, Ashland, Ohio
16 articles 9 photos 302 comments

Favorite Quote:
A word to the wise ain't nessecary it's the stupid ones that need the advise


Mourning

Fingers twisted through my hair
I miss your laughter warm and silken
The world grows dark without you there
My once bright soul grows hard and waxen

They say he's in a better place
So why do I feel my heart breaking
I long to see his smiling face
But all I feel is endless aching

People try to heal the pain
With tales of golden streets and wings of ivory
But with their stories it's the same
Fables of grandeur and fancies tawdry

They do not know where my friend has gone
For they have never passed through the mist
Though it means nothing life goes on
As I wish for the cold of death's last kiss


The author's comments:
I wrote this also for a school project.

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on Sep. 4 2010 at 10:42 am
Inherinerd GOLD, Ashland, Ohio
16 articles 9 photos 302 comments

Favorite Quote:
A word to the wise ain't nessecary it's the stupid ones that need the advise

Thank you!!!! This took me a while to write cause i wanted to get it just right

on Sep. 4 2010 at 10:40 am
apocalyptigirl BRONZE, Staunton, Virginia
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"DON'T PANIC." ~from The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy by Douglas Adams

yaaaaayy loved it and i don't really have any criticism. Anything I would want to adjust is really a matter of personal taste (not that there's anything I'd want to change anyway), so good job!!!

on Jul. 27 2010 at 2:36 pm
Inherinerd GOLD, Ashland, Ohio
16 articles 9 photos 302 comments

Favorite Quote:
A word to the wise ain't nessecary it's the stupid ones that need the advise

Thank you and i really didn't mind about your other comments

on Jul. 27 2010 at 2:34 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous

So since I've written kind of bummer comments on your last two articles, this may come as I shock to you... I LOVED THIS ONE!!!! Wow. Wow. Wow. Actually that's is exactly what I said after I read the last line.

The rhyming was effortless and genius. The flow was PERFECT... SPOT ON... FANTASTIC. Such raw emotions and you display them so well. 5 stars from me. This is great.



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