Slave

May 21, 2010
By CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 220 comments

He's a slave working hard labor,
Working to change his behavior,
And I'm lost without his smile,
Could warm my heart now comes denial.
He can't be gone not again,
Wishing I could save him from this end,
But I lost him; the building took his face,
Away away I would take him from that place.
While he's missing from my life; while hes gone,
I'll be singing only a heartbroken love song,
I miss his sweet kiss his adoring happy eyes,
Miss his touch on my cheek to wipe away my cries.
He was my angel never can I forget,
I gave him all my love now I'm in debt,
Without him I'm heartless wishing no success,
Without him I'm angry from joy I regress.
These tears pour down my cheeks he's not there,
Now I'm left alone again; alone with no one to care,
And I'm speechless and I'm broken without him by my side,
Even though he'd never know what he did to me inside.
When he was around me my eyes brightened,
My lips gave a smile and inside I felt frightened,
Because I knew behind that smile and the blush,
That he was only looking for the head rush.
I wanted him happy, wanted me to be what he was looking for,
I wanted to tell him if he just looked at me he wouldn't need all the drugs
anymore,
Love is powerful enough to make you dizzy,
And with him around, he made a mess out of me.
Nobody's perfect, everyone has flaws,
But I saw his as beautiful, it was okay to break laws,
To me he could blow any girls mind,
He was adoring, funny, and extremely kind.
His personality addicting his looks were too,
Now I guess he'll just be waiting to hear an I love you,
Because that place is hell it'll give him a taste,
Of what life will be like if he continues to waste.
Waste his time and his money and stuff he doesn't need,
Waste his talent and his personality when he really could succeed,
He's a bright kid just heading in the wrong direction.
He's the right kid, wish I could show him his perfection,
Because to me he's my everything, he's my personal drug,
Without him I'm feeling empty; needing his smile or his hug.
Although his love I can't find,
Cause he's left me behind,
So I learn to take his place as he had left before.
Leaving me to solve problems alone once more,
I struggle its endless but I think of only his face,
Its gives me the strength to win any race.
In a race against time can I overcome the clock,
Can I beat the past and run into tick tock,
This is the present and I'm learning this slow.
Learning the sadness I'm showing I need to let go,
Because when you get back you'll be better than before,
And I'll know I can only love you even more.
So keep a smile on baby carry yourself through,
Because I know deep inside how good you can do.



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CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Mar. 27 2011 at 4:35 pm
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
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Thanks so much! I'll be adding more poetry today.. a lot of my newwer work :)

on Mar. 26 2011 at 6:35 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"See, we don't really care who you are;
Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.
So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer's disease,
And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief."

"Sanctuary"- Paradise Fears

This was really, really great! I really enjoyed reading it! (: I especially loved,

"So keep a smile on baby carry yourself through,

Because I know deep inside how good you can do."

 

Anyway, it seems like a lot of work was put into this and that really shows! Keep writing poetry, you're really, very talented!


on Aug. 24 2010 at 7:40 pm
This is absolutely amazing. Great job :) <3

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Aug. 18 2010 at 12:10 am
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 220 comments
I love how you interpret my work, =] i love to make people think about my work after they read it, like its simple, and yet very complex. I'm glad you took the time out to read my stuff thankyou!!!

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Aug. 18 2010 at 12:07 am
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 220 comments
yeah this one consumed my time, but it was well worth my time in my opinion :) and thankyouuu again and again and again im happy you took the time to read my stuff! ill be sure to keep an eye on your work!

on Aug. 15 2010 at 2:59 pm
aquarius SILVER, Lancaster, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"unwelcome truths are not popular."

Returning the favour again. [: I really enjoyed this, I must say. I actually re-read it a few times, because the style seemed so contradictory at first. Bold and light. Complex and simple. And I love the movement of the poem--the way some of the lines are placed make it feel as if the author was sure what they wanted to say, but unsure of themselves in the way they said it. 

I don't know if that makes sense, but it does to me! :D Great job. I love your stuff.


Han15 BRONZE said...
on Aug. 10 2010 at 3:17 pm
Han15 BRONZE, Doncaster, Other
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This must have taken ages! I like how even though you've included rhymes, it still flows and fits together.

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Aug. 3 2010 at 6:45 pm
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 220 comments
I really really appreciate your opinion thankyou <3 :)

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Aug. 3 2010 at 6:41 pm
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 220 comments
Your right some of the lines were too long i needed to cut some words out, i never liked doing that though haha ;) and thankyou !! 

on Jul. 19 2010 at 5:52 pm
MustangWriter1813 PLATINUM, Crooks, South Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
" No one can told you back besides yourself " MaKayla Claymore class of 2013

I like this but some parts of it don't flow together as smoothly as you would probally like them to. But over all it was amazing. I don't know what else to tell you...but it was amazing just work on making your ideas flow

on Jul. 18 2010 at 10:35 pm
amicrazyorisitjusteveryoneelse PLATINUM, Kula, Hawaii
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Favorite Quote:
"Everything you dream is real and everything real is a dream"

Wow...  this is... just... breathtaking...  amazing poetry   this is the essence of poetry... your heart is in this   i can feel it




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