The Wind's Whisper

May 30, 2010
By riley... GOLD, Yakima, Washington
riley... GOLD, Yakima, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"i became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity." edgar allen poe.


Remember those days and weeks
Where snowflakes kissed so gently your cheeks,
And the world stopped hurling, if only for a moment,
And stared in awe of your angel-inspired tint.

Remember the nights in the fields so chilled,
Our stomaches and hearts hot cocoa-filled.
We laughed until the yule-tide commenced,
And then we laughed some more despite our parents.

We sung of joy, and actually felt it;
Cold or clear nights couldn't condemn our spirit!
The snow almost came only to show you off,
Proclaiming your grace in the wind's whisper so soft.

Now oh so quickly the wind stole you away,
And I search for those solstices day after day;
Never to find them, only to look
For the priceless gift that the wind's whisper took.

The author's comments:
Winter romance, always a bummer. :)

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on Aug. 15 2010 at 7:30 pm
Stormythrone BRONZE, Anchorage, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
Nothing is good or bad. Its thinking that makes it so. -Benjamin Franklin

right* if I could spell ><

on Aug. 15 2010 at 7:29 pm
Stormythrone BRONZE, Anchorage, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
Nothing is good or bad. Its thinking that makes it so. -Benjamin Franklin

This is amazing and haunting (in a good way) it really puts the reader write there. I love it! Keep writing!

on Aug. 11 2010 at 1:18 pm
wild-free BRONZE, Billerica, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"All good things are wild and free." - Henry David Thoreau

"It does not do to dwell on dreams and forget to live." - Albus Dumbledore

Beautiful. I could really feel the chill of the entire poem-of winter and lost love. It felt very personal to the reader. Again, great job. You have a very strong talent!

 

If you ever get a chance, could you take a look at my short story Gone With the Sun? Thank you!


on Aug. 10 2010 at 1:44 pm
squidzinkpen SILVER, Buffalo, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"The Irish gave the Scots the bagpipes as a joke, but the Scots haven't seen the joke yet"- Irish Proverb

This is fabulous! You're an amazing writer, really, you are!

on Jul. 19 2010 at 9:56 am
Meganchristine BRONZE, Millville, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"You can do no wrong in the eyes of a follower"

“To accomplish great things, we must not only act, but also dream; not only plan, but also believe.”

I really really like this. It captures the essance of winter very well

on Jul. 13 2010 at 5:55 pm
sky_is_womb BRONZE, Moorestown, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
All the soarings of my mind begin within my blood- Rilke

the last stanza was beautiful! good job!

on Jul. 12 2010 at 6:50 pm
Just.A.Dream SILVER, Lake Geneva, Wisconsin
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Part of the J7X team. :)

I love the beginning and the ending! I have to agree with the comment below me, the last stanza is my favorite too. :)

on Jul. 8 2010 at 4:48 pm
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow
By Me:)

It's pretty good:) I loved the last stanza. could you comment on my work?

on Jul. 6 2010 at 1:43 pm
...PensiveGurl... PLATINUM, Aurora, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
You get ideas from daydreaming. You get ideas from being bored. You get ideas all the time. The only difference between writers and other people is we notice when we're doing it- Neil Gaiman.
Who are you to be who you are?-Le'Na Pernell

i really liked this poem because 1. winter is by far my favorite season, and 2) it was written really well!

the last stanza was like the grand finale of the poem and i loved that part a lot. Awesome job!


riley... GOLD said...
on Jun. 28 2010 at 6:51 pm
riley... GOLD, Yakima, Washington
13 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"i became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity." edgar allen poe.

why thank you

on Jun. 28 2010 at 8:21 am
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

whoa this poem was fantastic!!! and wen u mention hot cocoa u really took me back!!^^ the poem also really had a goood ending. awesome work there :)


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