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My heart was whole
Until my love you stole.
You turned my heart from a picture to a puzzle.
My mind you chose to bumfuzzle.
I will never be as I once was.
You turned me from soft cement to stone.
My love for you is long gone.
I will get my revenge.
I’ll show you what it’s like to be:

A door without a hinge, to be
A boat without the wind, to be
A story without an end, to be
A puzzle without print.



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Basketball23This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 11, 2011 at 4:33 pm:
I LOVE EVERYTHING ABOUT THIS!!!!!!!!!!  THIS IS PHENOMENAL!!!!!!!!!!!  You're an amazing writer!!!!!!!  Keep up the outstanding work!!!!!!!!!  I love all of the comparisons within the text, it's just amazing!!!!!!  I wish I could write like that!!!!!!!!  Oh my goodness this is AMAZING!!!!!!!!  I can't believe it!!!!!!  WOW!!!!!!!!
 
Starrlyt replied...
Mar. 21, 2011 at 12:53 pm :
Thank u very much. I've never had anyone critique my work in such a positive way. I appreciate it. :) But I merely write what's on my mind. I feel that I do not write to my full potential. Perhaps one day I will be able to impress myself. Only then may I be a true poet. LOl.
 
Basketball23 replied...
Mar. 21, 2011 at 2:36 pm :
Well I think you're a TRUE poet!!!  You definitely impressed me!!!!!!!  I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!
 
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