"To Be Without"

April 23, 2010
By Starrlyt PLATINUM, Willard, North Carolina
Starrlyt PLATINUM, Willard, North Carolina
20 articles 0 photos 90 comments

Favorite Quote:
Shoot for the moon, even if you miss, you'll land among the stars -Les Brown


My heart was whole
Until my love you stole.
You turned my heart from a picture to a puzzle.
My mind you chose to bumfuzzle.
I will never be as I once was.
You turned me from soft cement to stone.
My love for you is long gone.
I will get my revenge.
I’ll show you what it’s like to be:

A door without a hinge, to be
A boat without the wind, to be
A story without an end, to be
A puzzle without print.


The author's comments:
I have no idea why I wrote this...

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Basketball23 said...
on Mar. 21 2011 at 2:36 pm
Well I think you're a TRUE poet!!!  You definitely impressed me!!!!!!!  I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!

on Mar. 21 2011 at 12:53 pm
Starrlyt PLATINUM, Willard, North Carolina
20 articles 0 photos 90 comments

Favorite Quote:
Shoot for the moon, even if you miss, you'll land among the stars -Les Brown

Thank u very much. I've never had anyone critique my work in such a positive way. I appreciate it. :) But I merely write what's on my mind. I feel that I do not write to my full potential. Perhaps one day I will be able to impress myself. Only then may I be a true poet. LOl.

on Mar. 11 2011 at 4:33 pm
Basketball23 SILVER, Pine Grove, Pennsylvania
8 articles 13 photos 488 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm living in a shell with no soul" -Three Days Grace (World So Cold)
"Time still turns the pages of the book it's burned" -Avenged Sevenfold (So Far Away)

I LOVE EVERYTHING ABOUT THIS!!!!!!!!!!  THIS IS PHENOMENAL!!!!!!!!!!!  You're an amazing writer!!!!!!!  Keep up the outstanding work!!!!!!!!!  I love all of the comparisons within the text, it's just amazing!!!!!!  I wish I could write like that!!!!!!!!  Oh my goodness this is AMAZING!!!!!!!!  I can't believe it!!!!!!  WOW!!!!!!!!




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