I've always wanted... MAG

April 9, 2010
By timevampire GOLD, Bellville, Ohio
timevampire GOLD, Bellville, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Quoting yourself makes you an ass.


I've always wanted to write a good poem
That would unhinge your jaw and knock you off your feet,
That was arranged in creative stanzas so nice and neat.
That would make your hair stand on end and your mouth would foam.
Publishers with itchy palms would scratch their pens
On the dotted line where my name ends,
And missing relatives would come out of their dens
Swearing they baby-sat-me-once and I could make amends.
Because their time is worth my money.
I would be a household name.
But I don't think it would be the same.
My mind would be dark though my security sunny …
So I'll just stick to record players & the smells of a good coffee shop
And hope that the good poems just stop.


The author's comments:
I just was thinking about what it would be like to be a popular writer, and as you can see I'm a little bit of a pessimist. :)

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inkers GOLD said...
on Jul. 8 2011 at 11:18 pm
inkers GOLD, Midland, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"And the lamplight gloating o'er him threw his shadow on the floor... and my soul from out that shadow... shall be lifted, nevermore!" - Poe

Well, I think we all tend to hide our influences. But even so, I loved this.

on Jul. 8 2011 at 7:56 pm
timevampire GOLD, Bellville, Ohio
14 articles 0 photos 163 comments

Favorite Quote:
Quoting yourself makes you an ass.

Thank you. But I doubt that my writing is original... I merely have found how to hide my influences. But I'm glad that my poems fit in your heart.

inkers GOLD said...
on Jul. 8 2011 at 5:24 pm
inkers GOLD, Midland, Texas
10 articles 0 photos 41 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And the lamplight gloating o'er him threw his shadow on the floor... and my soul from out that shadow... shall be lifted, nevermore!" - Poe

This is very easy to realte to and very well written. I love how you don't sound cliche at all -- your voice is original, and I can tell that you're not trying to act like another person. You're just writing from the heart. Very good. <3

on Nov. 27 2010 at 7:27 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.
-Alex (aka GangstaEyes)
Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.
-Winston Smith '1984'
Don't go wishin' your life away...
-Daddy S2
"What a drag it was to be limited by reality."

Yeah this is really great! I'm a bit of pessimist too....actually a lottta bit!

Ill check out some more of your work


on Nov. 4 2010 at 3:51 pm
timevampire GOLD, Bellville, Ohio
14 articles 0 photos 163 comments

Favorite Quote:
Quoting yourself makes you an ass.

Thanks lady rocker girl person :)

& So does mine. I just meant that sometimes I don't want to be any good at it.


on Oct. 24 2010 at 2:21 pm
OrEoCoOkIeS BRONZE, Longview, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
love is venom that seeps and burns...until the time when its your turn to die.

this was awesome you did a really good job. my writing goes on forever :) though  i like yours.

on Jun. 25 2010 at 3:54 pm
DreamWriter17 PLATINUM, Marengo, Indiana
34 articles 1 photo 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
learn from your past to live for the future.

Either way, it's an interesting take on what would happen if you DID get what you want, regardless of what it was what God would want you to do.  We're all incomplete without God, so it doesn't matter if what we do is what we want to do or not, it would not be complete without Him.  So He would fulfill His will in accordance for  you, because He knows what is best for you.

on Jun. 22 2010 at 1:04 pm
timevampire GOLD, Bellville, Ohio
14 articles 0 photos 163 comments

Favorite Quote:
Quoting yourself makes you an ass.

I already have everything need. So the prospect or possibility  of having the things I deeply desire is a scary thing that creeps in the back of my mind. The thought of me being what I dream of or the pain it will take to get anywhere God wants me to go is a shadow that I'm afraid to let God shine out of my mind. If that makes any sence :/

That's the question isn't it. I mean your passion isn't always what God wants for you. Like George Washington love architecture. Yet he didn't get to live his life following that love. So that's where I'm at a loss.


on Jun. 19 2010 at 1:30 pm
DreamWriter17 PLATINUM, Marengo, Indiana
34 articles 1 photo 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
learn from your past to live for the future.

Getting everything I ever wanted isn't exactly high on my list of things to accomplish in life.  I would like to have everything I ever NEEDED, even if others have more, but then, I don't need anymore.  I just want to do what God would have for me, and if that doesn't include being a writer, that's alright, but why would He give me a passion for writing if He didn't want me to exceed in it?

on Jun. 19 2010 at 11:42 am
timevampire GOLD, Bellville, Ohio
14 articles 0 photos 163 comments

Favorite Quote:
Quoting yourself makes you an ass.

I hope you make it.

It's just my way. I some times just am afraid of getting everything I ever wanted.


on Jun. 18 2010 at 11:31 pm
DreamWriter17 PLATINUM, Marengo, Indiana
34 articles 1 photo 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
learn from your past to live for the future.

Aw, but I like this poem!  And since I want to be a writer when I graduate college, I can understand that it won't always be perfect.  I love the way you went from good and glory to not so great and down to "just stop".

Ammaz SILVER said...
on Jun. 1 2010 at 9:14 am
Ammaz SILVER, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"This is the way the world ends: Not with a bang but a whimper." - T.S. Eliot

Its one of the things I like about your poems. The reader is able to see what you mean and picture it. When I write its more about emotion or a part of a moment. It my writing is clear to me (well sometimes it isnt lol), but others might not always get the whole idea. Your writing isnt like that. Thats pretty cool

on May. 27 2010 at 6:26 pm
timevampire GOLD, Bellville, Ohio
14 articles 0 photos 163 comments

Favorite Quote:
Quoting yourself makes you an ass.

That's funny. I didn't think I could write clear pictures, but what do you know.

Ammaz SILVER said...
on May. 26 2010 at 7:41 am
Ammaz SILVER, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"This is the way the world ends: Not with a bang but a whimper." - T.S. Eliot

you really have a way with words. I really enjoy reading your poems. I'm not that great at writing what I think and feel sometimes, but when I do my writing is different from yours, I dont paint clear pictures, but rather emotions and bits of ideas. Its really awesome that you're able to express yourself like that.

on May. 19 2010 at 4:01 pm
timevampire GOLD, Bellville, Ohio
14 articles 0 photos 163 comments

Favorite Quote:
Quoting yourself makes you an ass.

Thanks :) I'm glad I could paint images in your mind that you liked :) I like your stuff to.

thechlo BRONZE said...
on May. 14 2010 at 3:46 pm
thechlo BRONZE, Harrisburg, Pennsylvania
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I love it! Both of your poems are great. This one reminds me of something I'd think about...I am a pessimist sometimes. You do a fantastic job of painting images in my head with your words. Thank you for my commenting my stuff, too!

on May. 11 2010 at 12:41 pm
timevampire GOLD, Bellville, Ohio
14 articles 0 photos 163 comments

Favorite Quote:
Quoting yourself makes you an ass.

Hahaha... Ok I'll try to be more dark in the future.

on May. 11 2010 at 12:40 pm
timevampire GOLD, Bellville, Ohio
14 articles 0 photos 163 comments

Favorite Quote:
Quoting yourself makes you an ass.

hey thanks. I'll read your stuff when it's on here.  :)

on May. 10 2010 at 7:49 pm
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD, Kansas City, Missouri
14 articles 0 photos 501 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"either write something worth reading or do something worth writing. -Benjamin Franklin

\"If columbus would have turned back, no one would have blamed him. No one would have remembered him either.\"

\"If music be the food of love, play on.\"

You are a great writer-can't wait to read more!!!

on May. 10 2010 at 6:18 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

oh please no happy stuff. JK I'll read it.


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