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I am always one step behind
My sister, strong and confident, leads the way
She is the moon, eclipsing my sun
During a solar eclipse
She is Jupiter and I am the faithful Io
Chasing her round and round
Like a puppy chases his own tail

Strappy high heels sink noiselessly into the plush carpet
And I walk one step behind
A hand clasps my sister's hand, warm and loving
Her laughter echos
As she reaches up to press her lips to his
And my empty hand aches
And I stretch my fingers out hopefully
But no hand reaches back
Because I walk one step behind

Polka-dotted green flip flops thunk dully
Against the scattered sand
And I walk one step behind
Sapphire waves lick and coil playfully
Around her ankles
Her pace quickens
As unseeing eyes stare into a bright future
And I run to catch up
Splashing clumsily through the now menacing waves
My eyes fixated only on her
And I walk one step behind

Black converse slap the sidewalk disjointedly
And I walk one step behind
As high-strung nerves make hands tremble
And bleary eyes make feet stumble
I reach out
To steady her
To soothe the jittering of her hands
But she whips around with blazing eyes
And knocks my hand away
So I retreat back into my shell
And hide the pain in the folds of my heart
Because I walk one step behind

But I don't mind walking behind
Because when my confidence falters
And my steps lag
She turns, laughing, and grabs my hand
She pulls me forward
And she kicks off her shoes, and I kick off mine
And we walk, barefoot
Side by side, hand and hand
My sister and I
Together.



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TheCometThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
today at 5:20 pm:
This is so beautiful!!! It is full of emotions and so deeply true. I honestly don't know what to say to be fair toward your poem ^_^ The story is very well pictured. I juts love the detail use, and the repetition of "I walk one step behind" it kind of gives it a special touch and really strong voice. You truly have a great talent. So keep it up and let the world be amazed at what you can achieve ^_^ Definitely 5 stars ;) Thank you for sharing this.
 
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Marlyre This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 16, 2010 at 9:42 pm:
the setting is great in this story! read some of mine?
 
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Ink_Stained_Fingers said...
May 28, 2010 at 10:35 pm:

wow...what a complex, emotional piece of work. i can just feel the longing, shyness and admiration of the younger sister, and i love how you used the shoes to set the tone of the stanza, and then tied it together with bare feet meaning equality.

great work!!

 
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ShernayB.This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 10, 2010 at 10:56 pm:
I'm crying. Just reading this and actually know whats goin on. But I feel like the big sister in this poem, and my baby sis, in your position, one step behind.
 
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